I heard them casually discuss a little murder
over coffee as if it came naturally.
Not a trace of doubt or moral inhibition,
and they all smiled so disturbingly.
I leaned closer like an unrepentant voyeur,
trying not to catch their plotting eyes.
Each was in their own words so enraptured,
savoring their darkened bloody prize.
The laughter and the clear anticipation,
the lust that hung on every word,
was frightening in it's cold dispassion,
a distant thunder scarcely heard.
A viper's tongue can scarcely taste the poison,
a hungry beast knows only of it's need.
The road to hell is paved with bad intentions
and the devil plants the darkest seed.
Their victim was to be a random stranger,
whoever happened in misfortune to draw near.
They desired neither fame nor fortune.
They merely wished to dine on victim fear.
Now, I'm not one for standing high in judgement,
nor for casting the first stone of blame,
but even I could recognize intention
filled with malice simply as a game.
I wished I'd never turned in their direction,
or caught the words that spoke so violently,
because I finally came to their attention
and they all smiled as they looked at me.
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Comments
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Thank for entering....wonderful piece
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Very disturbing write here, and unfortunately all to close to stories in the news. Nice rhyme. Especially liked the phrasing of "I leaned closer like an unrepentant voyeur." Well done!
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scary. that's all i've got to say.
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bombastic!
ooo, a chill in the embryotic realization of destructive fate. Perfect rhythm and seamless form. A choice story from beginning to end. well done.
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What a story! And you told
it just like a pro. I liked this
so much. I wish you well in the
contest.
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This is amazing, it really drew me and the final line made me shudder. I love the rhyme, the rhythm, everything about it. Excellent write!!
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riveting! sinister and spooky with a great twist at the end. The structure moved at a good pace and the flow allowed for a good uninterrupted read.
'but even I could recognise intention
filled with malice simply as a game'
sadly there does seem to be a sub culture of this nature growing.
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