Finding It hard to breathe
When my mind thinks of you
feeling hopeless under your gaze
Is what I have come to
I long for you touch
In the deepest hours of night
For you are my soul
And you are my light
I am you
And you are me
Two become one
For you set me free
Come to me
For I await
You are my love
And you are my fate
It pains me to think
That we can never be
I love you so much
But you don't see me
Author notes
this poem i wrote in about ten minutes about my best friend. I missed him so much when i went on vacation and so my feelings for him became clear when i was away for so long. feelings turned into words and this is what i came up with. I hope you like it and maybe relate to it.
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Comments
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kewlness
This was really good. I like the love that you expressed in this very romantic poem. You said what you wanted and what you like from this special person. You also had great flow and rhythm. Great write, great job, and good luck!!! -
very nice
i like how there was more depth in every line then what was said
like giving just enough insight but keeping youre thoughts personal
not sure if it was the intent but its what i gathered from it
good job ty for sharing
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