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cannot find a better lover

I almost regret assigning the stanzas for your ring-tone,
seeing as it drops the stock of the song.
Your poolside figure kept me verbal, just trying to talk you up,
those summer hours the only evidence we were young.
Three years in the making, rusted truck in the lawn;
your bulges stupendous, shower-cap a daily frock.
Not really a mid-life crisis, just a crisis in mid-life.
Admittedly, you don't have what it takes
to keep me home.

 

So I go out to pour chug,

and seek out finer treasures.

Leaving you dormant on the inherited couch.

Your soap-opera rituals, burnt chicken in oven,

never forgiving myself for asking you out.

 

At least I make attempts to wash up,

to keep the fingernails trimmed.

You make attempts to complain about my paychecks earned.

I only labor for the freedom of not seeing you,

the slouching shoulder visible underneath three-day old pajamas.

 

Love is described as being blind,

I'd rather be blind so I could speak of our love.

I am embarrassed to claim you, truly not a great find;

your mouth filled with rot,

and tongue coated with assaults.

 

Yet somehow I return,

liquored from Jameson shooters,

to trace your skin with longing and hope.

Throwing up in the sink come morning,

like, "What have I done"?

Although your presence disgusts me,

I'll be back tonight for your love.

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  • ecrivain01 gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    LOL ...

    this is hilarious. Reminds me of a lot of marriages I've seen over the years.


  • shirk
    April 20, 2008

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    Well. I'm not really sure what I think about this. some of your phrasings and stuff like that were great...But I'm just not sure. I'll come back to this one too. I like the way it's said, and what not.

    Thanks for your entry.


  • malmadre gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    whew! familiarity does breed contempt. I sent an e-mail today with the words 'soap opera'


  • bones7
    April 9, 2008

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    Wow.
    Great.
    sorry bro if this is based on you,but you wrote this great.
    My favorite lines are the blind love lines.