We are as a grain
of sand in the Sahara,
our massive dunes surround,
smothering wills while
destructions looms.
But can't we see
the beauty or find the heart
to take that one grain;
add it to another,
and build each other ?
We must gather
our grains, use them
as stepping stones,
to create a free world
where hunger and hate
are past, and love is long.
(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
April 09,2008
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I like the metaphor. Indeed, human beings are but grains of sand in the grand scheme of things. One grain added to another can do so much more than one single piece. I really like this. Keep writing. You have talent.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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Wayne
I truly believe if we join together, we can make a huge difference in this world.. Thank you for all your reading and comments. d
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wonderful
makes me wish to be that grain of sand, free and true... perceiving beauty as it is... -
Grain makes for a nice metaphor; the second stanza was my favorite. : )
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Sharp
Thank you very much.. I am so glad you enjoyed this. Blessings. Debby
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You are so true! Nowadays this kind of wisdom is rare but I can feel it growing!
'We are as a grain
of sand in the Sahara,
our massive dunes surround,
smothering wills while
destructions looms.'
I loved the first line! It set me up for the big picture! Beautifully done!
Kyle
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Kyle
Thank you so much ! Blessings. Debby
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This is great in the most beautiful way. It displays not only love but the underlying thought that we are mortal and fading. You have a way obviously of displaying love and the interaction between people that goes beyond the normal day to day. I would guess that at heart you are a romantic? The building of the sand dunes is a wonderful visual. RC
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Robin
Thank you ! And, yes.. I am a romantic, somewhat idealistic but also a realist. Lol.. A bit contradictory I suppose but me. I appreciate you taking the time to read me. Blessings. D
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In general, I liked this but I wondered about 'our' dunes, if an individual is a grain of sand how can the dune be made up of the person, or didn't I understand? but on the whole, really nice.
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Celadia
Our dunes is a reference to we.. meaning all the grains together make the dunes.. each person's grain.. added together. I hope that helps. Thank you for reading and your thoughful comments. Blessings. Debby
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I really like your message in this poem. I like the part about building up each oher. There should be more of that.
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Lady
THank you so much !!! Blessings. Debby
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this was beautiful and amazingly inspiring. i wonder where you got the idea for this? it's absolutely beautiful. i love how you didn't try to rhyme everything just let the words flow because the result was even more eloquent. very well done.
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Beautiful
Thank you so much. Actually, the idea came while I was watching idol gives back. I was looking into the faces of people who need so much and ask for so little and thought about how beautiful it would be if we all joined together.. what we could do. Again, thank you for your lovely comments. Blessings. Debby
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i love it!!! it just... i dont.... is that... look u only get one great comment on this poem, and this is f.u.c.k.i.n it!!!!!! oj oj oj. lol xx great write tho!!!!!!!!xxx
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bbyblue
Thankya ! I am so glad you enjoyed this .. Blessings. Debby
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Nicely done.
Grains of sand likened to the stars in the sky,
countless,yet unique when viewed one at a time.
If everyone could visualize the good that should be done to all of mankind,what a world we would have!
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Ross
Yes, what a world it would be.. thanks you so much for the comments and the sweet poetic response. Blessings. Debby
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What a great way of looking at us - each a grain of sand, yet when pooled together can form stepping stones to greater things. Liked the flow, and the message you share here.
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Granny
THank you sweet Granny. God bless. Debby
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thats a really cool (for a lack of a better word) way of looking at things, its really thought provoking.
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MIss
Thank you so much ! Blessings. Debby
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