play with nothing
fuck this game
I'm made from something
not the least bit sane
I only pretend
to hear your voice
to torture myself
is my only choice
I'm not okay!
but I thought I was
I thought I had changed
but my minds a fuzz
i can only create
whats been created
and I can only destroy
that whats related
forget forgetting
it hurts too bad
and I can't stand cutting
it's just too damn sad
so I'll take the step
the final leap
into my path
to kill this creep
Author notes
ill go with option 1 =]
A contest entry
- Dark Writes Options Contest by Devient.
500 points, ended April 19, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - all HM winners! by Cat10.
850 points, ended May 19, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think in general? Improvements?
Comments
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thank you for entering! this is exactly what I was looking for! and how I write most the time! great, great job! and good luck!
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choose which option it relates most to or I can't let it advance at all. That said, wow. I thought this was a very interesting piece, full of passion and true emotion, in fact, it seemed like a breakdown! *btw, thats good,
. "I'm made from something
not the least bit sane" very good line, it made me feel like I could relate. There are times where I feel I am going insane, and weird or not, it adds a sense of empathy to your piece, people other than myself, im sure, can relate to it, as well as the poem in general.
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lol by the way I decided on option 1 for the contest
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good poem lol of course and good luck in the contest
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