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You are

Your kerosene kisses
collide with my heated heart
explosions burst as we fall in love

Take shelter within my words
you are my passion
I'd wear my heart on sleeves for you
as if a new fashion

You are my wind
my water
my earth
my fire

Baby you are my world
You are the color in my eyes
you are the cracker jack surprise
I am the five year old boy
Who worships you

My shinning sun of night
you are my world

My world



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Eh,work in progress I suppose

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  • Beautiful...I love the passion in this write at the beginning and it ends sweetly. your girl is lucky to have you Great write.


  • JustBreathe gold member
    April 13

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    This is great! I enjoyed reading it out loud. It's got a certain rhythm, an attitude. She is "your world" indeed! My favorite stanza?

    "Baby you are my world
    You are the color in my eyes
    you are the cracker jack surprise"

    Never thought I'd see cracker jacks in a love poem ... but you made it work dude! LOL Great write! Good luck in the contest.


    • bones7
      April 13
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      Thank youlol
      I improved alittle since you read my first poems.lol

  • SpydurPoet silver member
    April 12

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    This is a very beautiful poem. I love it. ChivalrousKnight is right - your choice of words is excellent.
    Beautiful, as always.
    Write on.
    ~*~

  • You should be proud. You do a very good job with your choice of words and metaphors. I think you are very talented and under appreciated.

    • bones7
      April 11
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      Thank you that means alot coming from a talented poet like you.
      I really appreciate your words of encouragement.
  • whomever this is written for must be very proud to have you as their servant
    aint love grand?
    if it isnt, then go to vegas and pay a grand
  • This indeed was lovely. Thanks for sending me the link. Best wishes in all you endeavor

    Passions

  • Jessie

    Jessie, he's gonna hit you up for a loan! Don't forget your hip-boots!

    (good)

  • penman gold member
    April 9
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    Wonderful

    Very well expressed. A great creation so full of terrific thoughts.

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