You cherish your innocence with what you've got left
Interrogating my once misguided emotions;
Pushing me slowly into a wondrous place in your mind
But you must be mistaken with your complications
For I am not a toy to be played with heedlessly
I plead you to open those beautiful yet deadly eyes
Because I recognize that deceptive smile
A captious gaze that lingers with suspicion
Torturing me with false promises of a silly thing called [ love ]
Eying your imperfections that build up almost instantly
Feeling your unclean hands creep over my trembling shoulders
Attempting to take away the pain you boundlessly inflicted on this heart.
[ My dangerous thoughts carry me to your dark mind one. last . time. ]
I can never let go even from what you've put me through
Your secret tears bargaining for compassion; someone to hold on to
We collide in your dreams but you're always running from that familiar face...
[ You .]
I want to help you, but you're continuously pushing me away
Contemplating on what to throw in my face this time;;
What revolting things you could say
I threaten I'll walk out that door; my conscience screaming, "what are you waiting for?"
I turn to leave your life another time,
But your arms around my waist commit the devious crime
Because I know that your broken heart will always be mine<3
Author notes
Mainly about a girl who's going through a really hard time with her boyfriend because he doesn't seem to care about the world or anything around him, but she still tries her hardest to be there for him because she cares .
YoureNoGoodForMe
zombiefiedmonkeycheese
option 1? or 2? haha
A contest entry
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That's all to say.
Uh, also: "Tortoring me with" is supposed to be "Torturing". >>
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thanks for the entry!
Wow I like this one
It was powerful, and your use of punctuation wasnt overwhelming
I think it started of really really well. But got a little weaker towards the end. Hmm. This is going to be a tough one to judge if all the entries have quality like this.
I think overall this was a really good write.And you followed the rules, good child!
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I think you couldve added more punch
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This is a amazing write i love it to death its so very well written it makes me jealous. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
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The emotions you've penned, along with "emotions images" really paint such a fabulous picture. wonderful poem
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good work! amazing write, good luck!
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deep and interesting
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Holy shit dude. This actually made me feel ill, cuz it felt like it was about me, lol. Does that make any sense? Idk. But yeah. Awesome peom. Thanks for entering.
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i literally sit here, with my mouth open... staring... A.M.A.Z.E.D.! i think i've found my second place. seriuosly this is amazing.. thank you so much for the engaging read. and after reading over 200 freaking entries i can honestly say it was great to read something i truly enjoyed. like i said, i may have just found my second place
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Wow, no, haha thank you for the amazingly nice comment ! It really just made my day !!
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amazing
this poem was really good it spoke out to me
even if it did come from the top of your mind you have mad skills in writing poetry i love this poem alot.
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~[]~Misty Marie~[]~
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Thanks ! I'm glad you liked it <333
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Wow, I really like this!
This is beautiful, especially the last three lines.
"I turn to leave your life another time,
But your arms around my waist commit the devious crime
Because I know that your broken heart will always be mine<3"
That's so beautiful. Very pretty!
Thank you so much for entering my contest, and good luck!!
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You cherish your innocence with what you've got left
Interrogating my once misguided emotions;
Pushing me slowly into a wonderous place in your mind
But you must be mistaken with your complications
For I am not a toy to be played with heedlessly
I plead you to open those beautiful yet deadly eyes
that was definitely my favorite part of the poem, and the first line was brilliant. "you cherish your innocence with what you've got left." i think we all do that, in the process of losing our innocence, except for those of us who lose it all at once. i know i certainly did that- cherished my innocence, what what i had left..
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ohhhhhhh wowwwwwwwww
this is definitely a really dark poem but i loveeedd it ! ahhhhhh <33333 definitely top 10!! god this was freaking amazinggg you dont even know !
*Feeling your unclean hands creep over my trembling shoulders*
this literally gave me the chills but wonderful imagery<3
*We collide in your dreams but you're always running from that familiar face...
[You.]*
DEFINITELY MY FAVORITE LINE!!!!! it's perfect and i just love it with all my heart !
*But your arms around my waste commit the devious crime
Because I know that your broken heart will always be mine*
my 2nd favvvv's, especially the very last line. brilliant way to end the poem! again, it's perfect. =D
ILOVEIT!!!!!
inmazing ahcredible job hoealicious<333
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