It doesn't matter whats wrong
I might feel gloomy
I could be enraged
It doesn't matter
The second I see your face all I feel is
Happiness
Love
Hope
Like the light at the end of a tunnel
You brighten the day
A contest entry
- MY PRECIOUS ROSE by Liquid memories.
450 points, ended May 10, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hope by Mai Crimson Regret.
300 points, ended May 1, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Will you give me an honest opinion?
Comments
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soft words describe the tender feelings one has for another. well done. success in this contest.
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nice
I liked the flow. You showed a tidbit of emotion in this poem pertaining to love, and blissful romance. not uncommon in starting poets, the rhyming seemed a bit forced, but all in all, I really liked this poem.
The flow was fairly smooth, and the message was short, sweet, and to the point. I liked your imagry used with the last pharaphrase: "like the light at the end of a tunnel you brighten the day."
Overall, I enjoyed this piece, and I think I will read more of your work. I think you must be new here, and no one is upset. just for future reference, people get mad when you 'spam' promote' or otherwise 'advertise' for reads.
Well, thank you for sharing this poem with me, and I hope to read more of your work in the near future!
Ashley [MISTAKE] -
:] This is so cute. I'm glad you found someone like that for yourself.
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