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To Jump or Not to Jump?

Looking down into
his soon-to-be watery grave.

Staring Death in the eye,
hearing church bells as he gazes.

What confusion lies behind
those deep blue eyes?

What sorrow
caused this him to contemplate?

What scene
would cause him to die?

How could I mend that split soul,
that heart that lies in two?

But I tried.

I see the newly aroused interest
flash deep within his dulled eyes.

One promise.
That's all it took.

For what confusion, what sorrow, what scene
would cause him to die?

Love.

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  • x-dont -ask-me-x
    May 7, 2008
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    that is so pretty and open and sad and real its so amazing I love it!


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    alot of feeling and emotion comes off this piece, which is obviously expected. you penned the reflection of this event well.


  • pancake
    April 19, 2008
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    Very very good and very powerful. Stunning.


  • SchizoChic
    April 12, 2008
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    Very well written. Thanks for your entry.

  • strawberryfields4
    April 10, 2008
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    Beautiful.

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