You...

who has always been there

spinning your web of lies

you were never truly there

you were just an illusion sometime

but when you were here you were my demise

twisting my heart in every direction

it saddened me so...

that someone i loved could be an imitation

some one with a heart as black as coal

my downfall...

my everything

Author notes

i used the word option Imitation, Lie, Heart, Black, Demise.

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bananasfoster42
April 29, 2008
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nice work with the word bank u had. thanks for the entry!
Melissa Gayle
April 15, 2008

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Because the piece is a bit shorter, I would consider removing some of the 'you's' - it becomes overdone.

I can appreciate your sentiment though.
Randomly Beautiful
April 14, 2008

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The you became too repititious for me. I think you should add an s to sometime. Thank you for the entry, and best of luck in all the other contests.
calendar girl
April 12, 2008
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pretty powerful stuff you got there.
nikkia
April 10, 2008

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great job! this poem flows very well and i love the way it's set up on the page. thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest
Poetryintheblood
April 9, 2008
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Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck, Josie
pink cats fly
April 9, 2008

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wow this has a great flow and i can feel what your saying even if it is for a character rather than yourself, it's strong.

louise x
Kelli Marie
April 9, 2008

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You did a wonderful job with your contest option. Very well written. I like your presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Kelli