Your kisses drive me into a high,
Tie together all the cliches and you have the picture...
I don't I hate that I love you.
But the passionate emotions,
So intertwined and confused amongst themselves
Perfectly content without me to further blur the lines
Your presence drives me to tears
Escalating only into confusion,
Add in some more cliches...
I don't love that I hate you.
Tangled in themselves,
Fire and smoke
Water and ice
They're not oppisites, only brothers
And I grudge against them both.
Author notes
"I love him so much, it just turns to hate"
This is not true. Fiction. lol for those of you who were wondering *innocent smile*
A contest entry
- Quote Inspiration. by Puking Faerie Dust.
1200 points, ended May 19, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What didya think?
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This was pretty good; I liked the last few lines the most. It sounds like it has a bit of attitude but you're not obnoxious. Thank you for entering, and good luck
Jeanette*~ -
Dude, that's really good for your age! I wish I started writing sooner than I did, maybe I could have written stuff like that a few years ago! Alas and nonetheless, this was a great read and I enjoyed it a lot. I really do hope you do well in your contest!
Cheers,
~Inez the Redd
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This is soooo awesome!! It's like 10 times better than what i did for my quote on this contest! I love all the vocab you used and the ends of your lines, they were all powerful and stuff =] But good write!
*KT*
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Yay you liked!!! I think yours was really good though
Emma entered too. And thank you for your wonderful comment.
May the best poet win.
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yes...thanks for clearing that up..I can never help wondering On to the writing: I love the repition and you are certainly brancing out your writing style well...its really cool! Great write and good luck in the contes
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good job
Hmmm. Quite different from some of your other poems I've read, Merideth. But creative nonetheless. You certainly have a gift for writing. Thanks for sharing.
Your pal Brian
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Thank you for the comment! I'm trying to branch out in my writing style a little.
-Meredith -
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You're trying well Merideth and it shows. Be proud of yourself.
-Brian
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"Opposites" attract that's for sure, and there is a fine line between love and hate. A bit of cliche there myself...lol This is a great write. Good luck.
Kelli
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