I just want
to feel your hands
clasping my face.
I just want
to memorize
the flecks of colors
in your flitting eyes.
I just want
to study the shape
of your strong lips.
I just want
to spread my fingers across
the vastness of your back.
I just want you.
I just want you.
Author notes
"ForeverLastingComa"
A contest entry
- I'm in the mood for ANYTHING! by ForeverLastingComa.
550 points, ended April 25, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - all HM winners! by Cat10.
850 points, ended May 19, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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thank you for entering! this is a really nice piece! I really enjoyed reading this! it was really unique! you did a great job! good luck!
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to me this is a sneaky way of writing a seductive poem..if not i need to get my ming out of the gutter..i like seductive poetry..makes me want to grab the poem and just keep it to myself...I'm weird..*sighs* nice write i enjoyed reading this one a whole lote =D my favorite lines were
the flecks of colors
in your flitting eyes.
I just want
to study the shape
of your strong lips.
i also liked the way you ended this poem repeating "i want you" it shows that you are desperately wanting the person.. or object? most likely person.. lolz..nice write..good luck in the contest
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