Here's my scenario -
a cliche skirmish with my mind,
trying to decide between my 'love'
and my overwhelming hate.
Why am I so drawn to you?
Your looks are magnetic,
your smile so tempting.
But something about you
just isn't right.
Could it be how you always forget to call
or maybe it's because you never seem to listen--
the way your eyes glaze over
like being unconscious is more fun.
The more I think, the more wrong those sound.
But that's the problem with me, I can never
get anything right...
... or maybe it's because I love you more than I love myself.
Your being as magnetic
as you are
causes me to love,
but loving is the only real thing I have.
I hate that I hate myself,
I hate that I love you.
I hate this place,
I hate this life,
so what's the point anymore?
Loving you.
Author notes
"I love him so much, it just turns to hate"
- 'Doll Parts' by Hole
Hope I did it right.
A contest entry
- Quote Inspiration. by Puking Faerie Dust.
1200 points, ended May 19, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "Opposites" Attract, Prewrites Accepted by DeadlyTurnip.
1400 points, ended June 13, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you! I liked it, but I already commented and my contest is 2 weeks overdue. So I'm going to move on to my other entries lol.
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This was very interesting and definitely had it's own feel/atmosphere to it. The flow was nice, too. The only thing that I somewhat disliked was how it sounded like more of a story with line breaks. Still good, of course, just maybe a little bland. Thank you very much for entering, and good luck
Jeanette*~ -
omg Emma this is like ten times better then my poem hahaha yeah, nobody really liked mine...
But this is really good! I luv all the description you put into it too, it was really well written!
*KT*
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LOL i entered the same contest on the same quote! So did Katie! May the best poet win. This is really good though
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