It's a darkness within
Don't call it sin
It hurts the soul and others
Mostly your mother
Suicide at high tide
Find him laying on his side
Rivers of red you can see
Flowing off of him without cease
All because he was teased
Offered drugs and dope
It was more than he could cope
A life ended on a full moon
No one could sing a tune
Depression hurts all
Don't be the first to fall.
A contest entry
- the biggest prewrite contest ever by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 18, 362 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hiden saddness by HatedLoveDieingRose.
422 points, ended March 2, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
very good writting -
super duper
wow, youre a truly inspiring writer, great job
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great awesome astounding
i love this one really awesome flow its great awesome and lovely i know how this feels
for awesome relations
i give u
3 applauses and remember
applause is like apple sauce
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An old man, such as me
remembers feeling such as these. I, too fight the demons of self esteem and drug abuse. May your writing teach you to cope.
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wow!it is sad but is true.
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again a poem i can relate to.
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wow AWSOME AWSOME AWSOME AND I MEAN IT SO PLEASE PUBLISH IT
speechless!!!!!!!1
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Wow this is awesome. I really really like this.
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i agree. u had good rythm and word choice ^_^ a sweet write.
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wow
its, well, true..its a good write =)
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