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Im not the same

I feel so diferent
Not the same
I feel like I lost something
Dear to me

Lost in space
I cant find me
You look at me
I look at the ground

Im not here
Im somewhere else
Lost in space


Look for me
In my face
Another place in space

Please tell me what you think

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  • longlife
    April 9, 2008

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    wow this is a great poem for someone who is just ten years old.The best part of it all was most definetly



    Im not here
    Im somewhere else
    Lost in space
    But the only thing I may suggest is that in the 4th paragraph you said the exact same thing as what you said in the 3rd,but it would be hard to think of another word but still.

    Yet this is a great poem.Good job


  • passionate-poet
    April 9, 2008

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    illconfidence. a very emotional poem, i love the honesty and the emotion that you share. a terrific poem!


  • Kelli Marie
    April 9, 2008

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    Hmm...are you lost because of shame, is that why you look at the ground? Are you lost because you are at a time in your life that you just don't know who you are any more? There could be many reasons....a nice write.
    Kelli