reality smashes sentiment's smiling face,
as wishful thinking wanders lonely paths
Author notes
Prompt::
And I'm here,
remembering all my memories,
while they are forgetting
me.
- Chandni
Misplaced [mentality]
P.S. If you don't credit I'll eat your liver.
P.P.S. I'll also eat your kidneys if you use the words "memory", "remember" or "forget" [or any variation thereof]
A contest entry
- 11PoetsX11WordsX11Minutes by Exodus.
380 points, ended April 10, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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That first line is a kick in the face with a steel capped boot.
Wonderful work, thank you
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Very nice write that flows of the tongue. Two things, "sentiment's" should have an apostrophe and as a suggestion "wishful" changed to "wistful." I just like wistful better, *laughs*. Great work here, especially the vivid smashing of a smiling of a face.
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sad realizations said with smooth delivery and grace... very well done.
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