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The Tears I Cry

I sit here watching the world go by
As no one see's the tears I cry
I sit here with a fake smile on my face
pretending everytings okay

I can't take back what I did
I can't take back what I said
The words are running through my head
Over and over
again they play

No one seems to understand
No one seems to see
I messed up big time
and it won't fix this time 

I'm broken inside
from hurting you
I can't seem to find the words
you can't seem to find the time

So i'm sitting here watching the world go by
And no one see's the tears i cry

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  • phoenixonfire
    April 21, 2008
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    This comes to me as more of a lyrics then a poem because of its simple wording and some repition!! This could be used to make a nice song!! wonderfully sweet!!! Just try to give it little more imagery than emotions! Good work!!

    Thanks for entering and good luck!!

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