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Thrill surfing renders-

Multiple mass sensual sense-sations.
Entire evolved energy easily escapes.
Hailing hilarious hankerings, happily.
Rush ruling ritual's renditions.
Soft sexual silk senses supplied.

Better be bending benevolence boldly
it's the only way to capture thrill's eye.

Thrill riding does beggar unfolding
reaching for pie in the sky.

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  • phoenixonfire
    April 22, 2008

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    Excellent metaphors and random abstractions very solid and beautiful!! I like the forceful way u seperate sense-sations. It leaves a mysterious tinge to your work!! A beautiful abstract creation!

    Thanks for entering and good luck!!

    pri


  • individuality gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    good use of alliteration here with the liens flowing along smoothly - mmm did someone mention pie where is my slice a good poem.