The little tipsy spider
he liked to drink his stout
scared all the barmaids
drinking from the spout
upchucked a bit
then started in again
yes the little tipsy spider
was every drunkard's friend
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Written December 10th, 2003
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I am into elimination rounds now and stepping up this competition in order to give people a chance to see what's remaining and submit something new that may make it into the Humor Anthology. Sorry if this hurts anyone's feelings but I'm making book.
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Thanks Sam, I think maybe Leanne likes her "drinking poems" a little too much, which gave me an inside edge on the competition. LOL
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hehe, i love this one. everyone loves to laugh at the drunks, and a drunken spider, i imagine, would be comical indeed. maybe i should leave out some liquor for the spiders... lol
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great write....and congrats!!!!!! My problem was staying to where they were for kids too.....lol
This was really cute.
Sam
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This is great.. it fit perfectly into the rhyme. lol Cute. Congrats!!
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hehehe this is good really good....take care...peace...DI...got me laughing kool write..keep it up.
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Leanne must be an emotional wreck, half the poems leave you laughing and the other half leave you crying. I guess you need them both to stay well balanced. This is a nice, fun, lighthearted contest.
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Thanks Lanna, you're right and I like the flow better with "drinking from the spout". Who says critiques don't work?!? I'm off to edit. Thanks for the comments.
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roflmao...brilliant!!...still laffin as i type this!!!....loved it!!...hugs...xxx
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I'm gonna have to pass this on to a friend or two - it's hilarious. One thought - "drinking from the spout" fits the melody line better than "when he drank from the spout." There's just too many syllables there to fit without sounding crammed.
Great write
Alanna
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