To make you smile, cry, and laugh in this worldly cage
We toil our energy & time at this tender age
just by slinking to arms and ammunitions in our shoulders
although we are supposed to carry the books in our arms.
Why? Why? Why?
What sin we did to others
Just because of the greed of fanatic forces thrust upon us
to save our country men and honour of the nation
we avail ourselves as a warrior and acts as the saviors.
Guns are not our passions
yet the necessities made us the compulsions.
The day our enemies shattered our dreams of a free nation
where one cannot live with dignity and self respects.
Our struggle starts
Although Gun Culture is not the only solutions
Yet it's one among priorities
Gone are the days of freedom
And it’s the duty to save our citizens from those vultures of dictators
who swindled our natural resources as well as thrust us in to slavery.
The greed and power hungry nations
Goes on to exploit the under-developed nations.
Imagine the fate of our universe at the hands of big powers
History has shown the pictures of war torn zones.
Be it in Vietnam, Afghanistan, Somalia, Iraq, SriLanka or any nations.
Power hungry politician’s exploits & force a war on the poor.
Why? Why? Why?
Only to satisfy their political ambitions and make their country rich,
ignoring the innocent souls misery & starve them to death.
Knowingly they bound upon inflicting rivalry amongst each other
and spread the hatred ness among brethrens citizens.
Each country has its own problems to fight with
Yet it’s the super powers that bent upon to swindle the poor nation’s wealth.
Religions and regions should not divide people’s ambitions
Faith and Trust alone should prevail to bring in peace.
Gone are the days of freedom & safety
Rich exploits the poor,
Nature some times too play its fury with floods, earthquakes, and drought
Hope is the only savior to come out of the blue
Young and old deserves to Live
Yet not the way they fight for survival with arms and aggressions
May the Lord pave the way for a peace and prosperity to all.
Let all hatred ness and enmity vanish
And brotherly love rules amongst all citizens.
Here I dream a world of humbleness in which:
Let there be a World with full of Love
Be it a Human or Animal or any nature’s living planets
There is no disparity among the rich and poor
No hatred ness among any communities
No suppression against needy
No more war amongst the nations
Where all humanity flourish with mere Love & affections
Let the Mother Earth be a shrine & shelter for all.
Where Faith & Trust alone prevail.
Subbu
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I could'nt agree more!
For starters, let me say that i agree with your thoughts--how the super powered nations supress the other nations. War is not a part of the human nature (well supposedly) but we cannot ignore the fact that that the 'need' of personal satisfaction is part of the human nature. Unfortunately, this need depends on each person. Meaning, some may consider and justify 'evil' acts just to fill their own 'needs'.
In my own opinion, even if others justify these evil acts, WE are still humans--kind, caring, loving, rational, NATURALLY GOOD.
In another view, war itself is the counterpart of peace. Without war, how can we appreciate peace?
Without the oppressors there will be no saviors.
Without hunger we will not be able to appreciate the taste of food. Without sadness we will not know happiness. Without hatred we can not forgive. Without sin we will not know salvation. Without death we can never appreciate life.
It is all in the balance. What matters is that we--humans--learn how life can be worth living even if sometimes we think it's not fair.
NOW! Shall we go to the physical structure?
I'm not going to say much about how you wrote the poem since I,myself, is not yet that good.
But maybe we all have to make notes about important matters such as 'grammar'.
I'm not an expert since english is not my first language but i noticed some errors such as:
1.
"we avail ourselves as a warrior and acts as the saviors."
*Always remember the subject-verb agreement
This part should be...
*"WE avail ourselves as WARRIORS and ACT as the SAVIORS"*
2.
"Although Gun Culture is not the only solutions"
This part should be...
*"Altough Gun Culture is not the only SOLUTION"*
THAT's IT!
LET'S KEEP ON WRITING!
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