I sit, I watch the ripples here
that lap the shingle, where the firth
bleeds out into a gentle sea
made silver by the rising day…
The plaint of wheeling gulls I hear;
they know this sea – it laves the earth
by rise and fall, eternally;
my ebb, my flow, my life’s the Tay…
Author notes
Simple iambic tetrameter abcd/abcd, inspired by the artwork of Ken Bushe
http://www.kenbushe.co.uk/html/air_-_sky_and_cloud_paintings.html
and in particular, this one:
http://www.kenbushe.co.uk/html/_broughty_ferry_castle_.html
In a list
A contest entry
- Ebb by Mirthryl.
1050 points, ended April 21, 2008, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful imagery an flow. Congratulations on the silver.
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Thank you.
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Lovely meter and rhyme. Delightful imagery. Lovely concluding lines. "My life's the Tay" either as a metaphor for the river flowing into the eternally sweeping sea, or as a beloved site of home, or lifelong occupation. Much enjoyed!
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Lovely.It seems that you spend a great deal of time in thought and are at one with nature.A very good place to be, Ros
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It isn't a bad place to be, you're right.
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Simply elegant poetry.
I miss you from this side
of the wall...but, I have
one leg over. Catch me
if I fall...Love, Lane (KC2)
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Jump. You'll be fine.
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Very nice. Scotland really intrigues me, especially its music. I would love to go there.
Love your morph too by the way, it works really nicely!
Good luck in the challenge.
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I absolutely LOVE the way you write. This is truly a treasure! Well done. ~Pamela
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Thanks, Pam.
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Beautiful picture as only you can paint.
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Thanks Baz.
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Lovely piece of poetry and a perfect response to Bushe's evocative artwork. Very well done.
Bill
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Thank you, Bill.
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Ahh... once again, beauty drips from your quil dispelling tension in the reader's soul. The gentle flow of this poem is noted within perfectly with "ebb and flow in the last line making the reader 'sigh' at the end. Bravo dear sister!
Love,
Amera
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Thank you, Sis.
Did you check out the art in the links?
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No, but I just did, they're beautiful; thanks
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