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Bubble Bray

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Time’s muzzle mocks ambitions. Day by day,
through life’s incessant dream theme ebb and flow,
efforts, unrewarded, seem vain show.
Effects’ and causes’ subtle interplay
none may control, - coincidence at play
enacts a chance dance time mime stop and go
whose pattern frame spins into vertigo
flaking dates and energy away.
Harmony and Chance Time’s tides obey,
cannot be reined, restrained, no string and bow,
fires through some causal bull’s eye to echo
sense sustained.  Profane, with bubble bray,
most blow hot, cold on stage, then sink unheard
before they even feel flow’s ripples stirred...

 

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  • Fantastic!

    Background is awesome!! Just too many beautiful lines to pick from...I love reading your work!!

  • Mirthryl
    April 11

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    Overall nice rhythm, rhyme and internal rhyming! Dizzying sense of random, uncontrolled unfolding of consumptive chance. Lovely "Harmony and Chance Time's tides obey." Very smooth spoken effect. The intended meaning of the title, reiterated in line 12, escapes me, as bubbles burst and pop, but I associate "bray" with donkeys. The "most blow hot, cold on stage" reminds me of a much enjoyed Aesop fable.
    Thank you for sharing your thoughts, and for your entry in my contest!
    • Bray along the Way

      Donkey or ass may bray
      both loud and empty sound
      while tide full ebbs and day
      to night cedes, still, profound
  • Superb

    A most incredible write indeed, my friend. I love the way you have illustrated it. Hope all is going well for you. Have a good day.