Although you don't know me well, Know I am changing the aromA
Never again shall I hear you, never again shall you be seeN
Everyone I meet will never know of the old AtmospherE
Which you used to bring, only what I carry with me noW
Life will still go on, after all, this isn't high schooL
I don't need you to survive - you no longer have an alibI
Forgetting you may be difficult, but for you, I shall always be deaF
Every day now should get easier, as your memory becomes more difficult to seE
Author notes
Realized I messed up the first time around... so go me giving it a second shot!!
And it gets easier as I do them... hehe these are actually becoming quite fun to write! *heart*
A contest entry
- Mirror Acrostics by LanguishedLad.
950 points, ended April 23, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Like the poem and the sense of taking back your life in it. Tinged with sadness....
Well done!
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This was cool. Kudos to you! thanks for sharing
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Hm... I like the idea of this one, but the last word seemed way too forced. It really seemed to change the meaning of the actual thought.
But, it was a good poem overall... well done
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-{I found this quite interesting. The words do not flow very well, but I love the way you messed with the capitalization of the letters. Aside from drawing attention, it conveyed the message a bit stronger.
Speaking of the message, I really like the way you put it. Getting over people can be hard, but this poem makes it seem easier than most people believe it to be. I laughed whole-heartedly at the high school analogy, by the way. ^_^}-
-{Enchanted-Emo}-
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Forgetting you may be difficult, but for you, I shall always be deaF
Every day now should get easier, as your memory becomes more difficult to seE
I am glad that I was brain washed into coming here to read this
I love seeing new styles (At least, new to me) and read ppl's stuff I haven't before.
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Very cool concept here with the double-sided acrostic! I've never seen this technique before. It must be difficult to make these flow smoothly, but you did an admirable job. Thanks for sharing!
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I really like how fluid all of this seemed, especially since the first and last letters had to spell the same words
that seems hard to do without making things seem forced, but you did it Really liked the first two lines of the last stanza
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
A+wesome
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i like it. its really good message..its a little hard to read..i dont know its possibly just me...but i like it alot great stuff
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I liked the overall message the poem conveyed. I like the empowerment of getting over this person (note how I'm talking like I really don't know what you're talking about). I'm not a huge fan of it technically because the flow isn't very smooth, and a couple of words seem to be out of place. I don't think the word "climate" is the proper word to use. It kind of works, but there are a billion other words that end in "e" that you could use. You kind of redeemed yourself though at the end because I liked the last stanza. I like the "this isn't high school" analogy. Very true. Glad you see it It would suck if you said "this isn't college!" but we're going there soon so HOORAY!!! haha.
Wanna hear something scary? I'm looking at you right now!! HAHAHA!
~Carli
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