In my dream
I'm sitting on the canyon wall
Then I jump
I feel the wind rush through my hair
I reach for the stars above me
I close my eyes and cherish the moment
It's not until seconds before impact
That I realize my fear
Because I will not exist
much longer
I wake up
I'm sitting on the canyon wall
Do I jump and live my dream?
or
Sit, and dream of living?
A contest entry
- climax by aliceramone.
525 points, ended April 10, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Free Verse or Prose Prewrites by Randomly Beautiful.
475 points, ended April 14, 2008, 15 entries
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Nice thoughts here. We live on the fence at times, I am afraid. I would like to see how this reads with some tuning up of filler words, perhaps different line breaks, etc. Thanks for your time.
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Excellent imagery and flow of verse--Very Very well done---Best of luck in the contest!
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This actually made me have to catch my breath... That is awesome when the imagery can do that... Best of luck to you!!!
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a good and unique take...nice imagery...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Wonderful take...
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Delila
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Wonderful poem here, full of emotions very well laid out...All the best!
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Wow, this is very intense. It kinda freaked me out for a second when it said you woke up.... on the canyon wall. Then I realized that it wasn't a sleeping type of dream, hehe. I've asked myself nearly the same thing many times. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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