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My Sweet Suicide

I came into this world,
Hidden in the shadows.
A nobody’s life unfurled,
And sentenced to the gallows.
Full of rage and sadness and hate,
Clinging for dear life, to my blade. Because

Chorus: I don’t wanna live this life, anymore.
Come to me my sweet suicide.
My sweet suicide is running to my door.
I welcome it and I want more.
Because life is a living hell that I don’t wanna live, anymore.
So my sweet suicide bring me relief, galore.
Come to me my sweet suicide, my sweet suicide.

You know we’re all gonna die anyway.
I might as well make it faster.
Suicide isn’t a sin to me today,
You know I never really liked the ideas brought by the pastor.
Suicide may be a sin to your religion.
But suicide is my only escape from the past made decisions.

Chorus

Come to me dearest suicide.
Come to my chest dearest blade.
Let the misery be released from my broken heart.
I never liked this world anyway.
And now’s my chance for escape.
So let the dagger bleed the poison from my heart
And release me from this hell.

Chorus

Come to me my sweet suicide.
Let me be put out of my misery.
Let mercy rain on me through my death.
Come to me my sweet suicide, my sweet suicide.

Author notes

So, one day a person named Kira was having a REALLY bad day. Kira was a song writer, so she wrote a song about it. Writing songs relaxed her, so by the time she was done she was happy again. Yay!

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  • November-Dani
    February 23

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    I do love poetry in song form. They have meaning. Music is the most important thing in mly life. This is so wonderfully written.
    Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you.
    Dani.


  • Violent Glass
    February 5

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    wow
    this was beatutiful
    your very talented
    i've tried and tried again to write a song about the way i feel and suicide but i can't get it right
    but you captured it
    great write thanx for sharing wiht me!


  • Abstract Image
    January 24
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    Amazing dark write i can soo much relate...good luck.

  • Vera Rich gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    Dear Evil Angel,

    you will by now be getting tired of my messages saying that you have misunderstood the purpose of my "Celebrating poetry and poets competition" - and in many cases have not taken heed of my request that texts be legibility.

    So even if there are more to come, I shall not make the same comments again.

    But I see from some of your entries that you are 14 years old. (Though why you should consider such information relevant to your entries, I cannot imagine. It cannot help your chances of success - and may in some cases evoke a subconscious prejudice against your work - the subconscious mind is a nasty thing). Well, if you are 14 and are serious about your writing, it is high time you were learning not only writing techniques, but also the basic rules of survival in the real world of publishing where writers are paid for their work.

    And that includes "studying the market" - i.e. taking careful note of what precisely an editor or competition judge is asking for! And, also, taking note of any other requirements of that particular outlet.

    Granted, Allpoetry gives only virtual awards, but if it is to be a workshop where aspiring poets learn and practice their skills, then it is surely important to learn the practical as well as the creative side of the writers' profession. If the host of an Allpoetry competition requests a particular format - he/she doubtless has good reasons for doing so. In my case (and the case of many other Allpoetry members I know) it is poor sight. Why, when someone indicates that for him/her legibility means e.g. black typing on a plain white or at the worst pale pastel background, do you not take a few minutes to comply? What is the point of submitting something that the competition judge will find painful to read. Fancy backgrounds and unconventional colour-schemes cannot turn a weak poem into a good one - and a good poem does not need them!


  • HiddenByTheDark
    July 23, 2008
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    I love this poem and can relate.. good job..

    ♥always Kate


  • AutumnsFlame
    July 9, 2008
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    I thought this was pretty good, actually, it did flow like a song is supposed to. There's one problem I have with it though: When you type the word "Chorus" in the middle of the poem, it upsets me as the reader. I really think it puts a break in the poem that's not supposed to be there. Other than that, a good entry. Thank you for entering my contest!


  • LullabyxxDreamer
    July 4, 2008
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    beautiful...good luck


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    June 2, 2008
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    well then.. wow. i love your story and you truly poured out your emotions. its written well in song form, however some of the rhyming is a tad forced =/ but maybe you intended it that way? very well written and i love the emotions behind it - been there myself. thank you for the entry and good luck!


  • Re-invention silver member
    May 22, 2008
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    wonderfully painted... we all roll down that road.. *sighs* i wish the same to myself... good luck!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 19, 2008

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    This is how I am often left feeling and considering I stand out as I am partially sighted I think it's more noticeable to people, which hurts.

  • Labefaction
    May 2, 2008

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    I can see this would make a very good song. It has good rhythm in most places, and I like the repetition of 'my sweet suicide'. Thank you.


  • Dak
    April 27, 2008

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    Nicely done song. I thought one or two of the lines were a bit too long, interupting the flow slightly. All in all, nice imagery and a good take on a worn out subject.


  • Redrusty66
    April 22, 2008
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    Awesome work, the flow and construction were so well done. There was ample room for personal perspective and interpretation as a good write should have. Great use of vocabulary and flow scheme. Amazing imagery held my attention. Thanks for the great read.

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