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Proud and Free

I release, myself from bond;

The bond which I—myself—put upon.

I relieve myself from pain,

Which I—myself—am to blame.

I strip myself off of cloth;

The cloth which shows not me but a moth.

Ah! I have never been so proud.

I feel like I’ am at the top of a mount.

Unbounded of rules;

Eased from self-mute;

Stripped off of the mediocre

In and out;

I cannot help my mouth,

Not to scream and shout

“I am free!”

What weakness in my writing did you see?

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  • purefriendship
    April 9, 2008
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    Excellent flow of emotions

    Thanks for the corrective measures to my poem and here I am feeling the touch of elegant lessons any well wisher can extend.
    Your proud and free has infact created an impact on how a mind can respond to the soul is excellent.
    Thanks once again for your advice.
    Subbu