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Son of a Breach

Where the crack began
it let the light in,
illuminating hidden diamonds
in the silky crust of the water,
shimmering like snake scales.

As the serpent--the crack--elongated,
side-winding down the rock,
reaching the tide as it rose,
allowing murky brown venom
to seep through--blocking the light--
it penetrated to the other side
to fall onto land that,
never before,
had tasted salt.

And the first plants died
under that constant drip
of false rain
percolating into the loam
where the poison seized
the root-heart and strangled it.

This, then, was the first born
son of the breach,
a harbinger of darker progeny
to follow in the sweet liquor
of corpulent bloating
and bacterial belching
of drowned corpse shells hung up
on natural fixtures
that survived the ensuing flood.

The harlot prostitute of decay;
the assuredness of change as abomination;
the wrong way to right the world;
that in the end,
remains, after all,
progress.

For Life emerges from Death,

and Death, who was here first,

never ceases to return for seconds.

Author notes

The breach as a conceit for a whole slew of items: New Orleans, the Fall, my lost love, the Dead, Society, religion...all of it. Maybe none of it. How do you feel about it?

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  • Tam
    April 13, 2008

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    oh wow...

    this is deep...and the author notes add to the vibe...
    very well done!
    Thank you for sharing your time and talent with us! I’m so glad you found inspiration in Tim’s artwork!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • twilight seduction
    April 10, 2008

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    Beautiful and hauntingly realistic

    Your sudden switch towards the end of your poem from imagery rich language to being pretty-up-front was terrific. I love poems that just switch that way; it keeps a reader thinking.

    When I read this, my first thought was (no offense to good christians out there, I'm sure some of you aren't as bad as I make you all out to be) "Baptists! Oh mercy, baptists!" *shrug* But the concept of death, so abruptly shoved forward at the end, that one got to me. After all, what is life but the time before death?


    • twaintwine
      April 10, 2008
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      It is the great equivocator! So, while we are here, what are we doing? This is it. I can't just sit by and not speak up. That's living death. We have to reveal our inner voices to the living world so our souls live. Without speaking, we may as well have never been born. Thank you for thinking. Aloha, friend.

  • twaintwine
    April 8, 2008
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    MINDBLOWING, DUDE

    Almost as good as your original music at www.nakedadam.net