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Losing my Heart

I should have stepped in, what did I know?
I had know idea God would make you go.
I would have said so many things, if I only had time
The way you left this world was such a crime
I saw the blood but did not believe my eyes
I heard all the sounds but didn't realize the cries

The blue and purple marks, sometimes you said you fell

Why couldn't you talk to me, why didn't you tell?

You said he was your hero, he was your knight

Deep down I knew some things weren't right

All the red flags, you had answers so true

How is it possible that nobody knew?

Outside looking in, you had a fairy tale romance

Never thought to give it a second glance

The blue and red flashing lights replay in my head

The knock on my door to tell me you're dead

He was a bastard to take your life

He never knew you were the perfect wife 

It all was a secret until that very night

The bullet in his head was the only thing right 

 

 

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 27, 2008

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    I felt so sad when reading this, it almost broke my heart completely... It wasn't your fault that you didn't do anything, you were too young to know and understand. Always here if you need to talk, but really it's not your fault.


  • nikkia
    April 8, 2008
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    this is a great poem the story really evokes a lot of emotion


  • LoveBetterDays
    April 8, 2008

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    Powerful

    I really had chill bumps reading this. I hope this didn't happen to someone you know... it is so sad and this type of thing happens all of the time. I really liked your writing...


  • CanadianGirl1
    April 8, 2008

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    Wow.. truly a remarkable write... seriously!!

    You were able to really draw me into this, and envision the entire thing in my head.. such a sad story though, and its a sin that this kind of shit STILL happens to such wonderful people... If its true I am very sorry... but it did create wonderful work.

    I look forward to reading more


    • Angelsojaded
      April 10, 2008
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      Thank you!

      Thank you for reading and commenting. Your words are encouraging! I am a survivor of abuse but I am no longer a victim. It is sad and true that it still happens every single day.
      Again Thank you!
      Blessings!


  • Angelflower
    April 8, 2008

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    Wow.. this was really intense.. I don't know what to say to this..wow.. just .. wow.. So amazingly done..
    Best wishes to you,
    Jetleena


  • Lislaine
    April 8, 2008
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    OMG

    so amazing! ur rhyming is amazing, the story is amazing, everything is amazing!


    • Angelsojaded
      April 8, 2008
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      Thanks for the read

      Thank you for taking the time time to read and comment!

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