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Swarm

While a family rests quietly and comfortably,
A swarm of dust attacks their proud home.
Darkness has been cast over all of the town's citizens
Because one of its own committed a sin so unspeakable
That God's wrath has hit this small town without mercy,
Making an example out of the entire town.
Now, this innocent family has been caught in the middle
Of a storm from which there may be no escape.
What will happen to this innocent family?
It's all in God's hands.


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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 25

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    Only God knows and hes not telling. This is wonderfully written, To bad the swarm attacks there home. Its a pleasure to read.


  • Dark Otter
    May 31, 2008

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    Interesting concept

    I think Wayne summed it up nicely. Its an interesting religious write that should be looked at as a moral message. Thanks for the read.


  • libithina
    May 28, 2008

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    How acutely observed how the innocent can get caught up in disputes often coming off the worst ..
    this almost reads like a sequel .. 'what will happen to this innocent family'
    'all in God's hands'
    excellently expressed

    s Lib x (Niaish ma eno)


  • storiesuntold gold member
    May 24, 2008
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    Good muse here

    This had me for a bit and you made it have life oops I forgot the clappies


  • movedon
    May 21, 2008

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    holy sha moly well done. This brought tears to my eyes. Congrats on the silver trophy. It was well deserved!

    Daddy's little girl,
    Mylee


  • KayJay
    May 3, 2008

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    Well deserving of recognition! And, the dustbowl isn't that far in future... Scary thought.
    Well done, sir..
    Ken


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 21, 2008

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    This is brilliant. I think I know where you are coming from here. You speak of 'God's Wrath'. Maybe the 'Day of Judgment'? In which the 'innocent' are caught in the middle of the 'wickeds' downfall.

    I mean, that is how I looked at this piece here. But whichever way it was meant, it stood out as a fantastic piece of writing.

    Well done on your trophy too.

    All the best
    Wayne Leon


  • warrior-eagle
    April 10, 2008
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    Wow.
    Wow.
    Wow.
    Thanks for entering my contest.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    April 9, 2008

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    midnightblue1272

    Nicely down certainly is in His hands lol. Great little write Good luck with it in the contest


  • Sandygram
    April 9, 2008
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    Great Poem!!!

    Great poem you have penned. Gee this sounds like my town but it the coal dust all over. We are a small mining town. A valley in the mountains, it is also God's country.
    Sometimes the innocent do feel the wrath of God too. A very original poem. Thank you for sharing.

    Bless you,
    Sandy


  • esroddo silver member
    April 8, 2008
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    Thats really sad but true

    They say that some times Innocent people pay for the ones that have committed the crime or offense. A innocent has to fall, to pay the price of a sinner. It like when God Died for our sins, And there are still innocent people dying for others. A very interesting write, LISA

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