A little scratch upon my skin
Made me feel so alive within
Just a tiny crimson line
But he said to me 'girl your mine'
'For every mark I see on you
Three more you will make me do
You think i'm gonna watch you bleed?
Babe I will just follow your lead'
My man, he wore his scares with pride
Knowing he was by my side
He was true to his every word
Cut himself until I was cured
But oh shit, reality came
He then knew how to play my game
He then knew how to feel so good
Like me he became misunderstood
Only then his wounds become too deep
Self mutilation he chose to keep
Content and happy, he found he could be
He caught fucking self-harm from me!!!
He caught it, he found it, and he's got it bad
He found the solution to the troubles he had
But I was cured, so what could I do?
Slash my wrists and bleed with you?
This is fucked up this is my fault
I didnt know cutting skin could be caught
It's not a disease but an illness instead
An illness so bad it could end you up dead!
I'm sorry babe, for whatI have done
Time for me to be the strong one
But what do I do to take the troubles from you?
Put some glass in my veins, so I can bleed too?
Ok it doen't get more real than this but honest opinions please
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ok this is a site to buy this book but im showing it to you so you can see the book itself and maybe you can find a free ebook version of it maybe I used to cut myself along ass time ago way before it became some sort of fad that got a lable to it ie "emo kids" but i bought this book and its very interesting alot of insight into why we do it and where it comes from if you ever need someone to talk to thats lived it all and isnt part of the fad lol ie none of mine are scratches there all very deep life long scars, i would love to listen to anything you want to say or chat about so any ways heres the website and again its just for you to see a great book on the subject
http://www.amazon.com/Cutting-Understanding-Self-Mutilation-Steven-Levenkron/dp/0393319385
ps i think i spred this disease to a few of my close freinds in my day too it sucks i know and i love your poem, and i hope my comments dont make me sound like im judging anyone who does this too i dont mean it that way its just that the lable "emo" seems to cheapin a very sierious mental disease that i suffered from, then again maybe it just shows the horrible state of the world now that so many might suffer from it too
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wow this is deep and heartfelt i hope thing work out no matter what happens and that you and him are able to control the urge to stop cutting
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Wow!
Such a sad poem but yet so good! Keep up the good work!
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Wow, this was just... terrific to me. I am very sorry that the person caught self-harm from you though. Maybe the person shouldn't of done it the way that he did. But terrific job. And yes, cutting does make some people feel better... I should know haha Nice job, hope to read more.
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amazing hun....keep it up xx
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This is a topic I'm not real familiar with though I do understand some about addictions. This piece has really made me think though and to me that is important whenever I read poetry. It definitely shows a journey to self-discovery which is always hard to express in a topic that hits close to home. great write!
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That is a very sad but very true poem. Alot do not know that cutting is spreadable but it is very true. Most cannot figure out a way to help their friends but the best way is to be a friend.
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Wow it's very,... very interesting! it really sends a message to people,... very good!
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this is interesting. i like that you're dealing with a personal issue, but examining its effects on what's around you.
on a side note, you're rhyme and meter move along well, stanzas move one to the next easily.
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very good
This also sends out a message to all that reads it!
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That is very good! Well written, and captures the emotions and the pain very well! Sorry you had this experience! I understand how cutting can make a person feel better for a while; but it is never the answer! Pain can't solve problems, only cause new ones. That is what I believe! Keep strong. God bless.
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Wow. That is stunning. I read it all the way through without forcing myself to which is a first...cause i have a low attention span but that was actually amazing. i hope your ok x yeah i cut but i stopped for 6 months but now ive started again...but that was WOW.
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great emotion on this subject but i know exactly where u are comeing from i use to have the problem..to..but hopefully its over..great job
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this is an exquite piece on such a horible subject of life
but i can relate to it on every level
theres so much emotion in this peice it tore me up to read it
i hate reading over mine to it brings up so much bad horrible memories this poem brought up some of the same emotions but its ok like the song says
our scars remind us the past is real
thank you for sharing this poem with me
keep up the good work
KITTY
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Excellent
This does have an honest emotional feel, and it is our experiences after all that make us who we are.
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This is really good. I can relate to it somewhatish.
I use to cut but I have stopped it.
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TERIFIC WORK!
This should be set to song!bravo!you have a new fan and thank you too. -
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lol thankyou, ps; if its that great wheres my applause? lol
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this poem, my ex use to hurt herself i cut myself for her this poem speaks to me though i was able to stop it it reminds me alot of her i wish i could write so well
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You honestly can't get more real than this --- I admire your way of capturing the true essence of your feelings and displaying them so vividly upon the page...very well done
Tom
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This Is Very Deep
What a powerful poem. So much truth and reality to what happens to people with self destructive behaviors they choose then loose. Your right, there is no way to fix somebody and if you are recovering like you said from doing it yourself, you have to be so careful not to slip back into the same old behavior. Cutting to cover the pain you feel deep within. A very emotional poem with strong imagery. The ryhme was perfect and this poem had a real strong message. I hope many read it because there is a lesson for all of us in your excellent poem.
I'm sorry babe, for what I have done
Time for me to be the strong one
But what do I do to take the troubles from you?
Put some glass in my veins, so I can bleed too?
Peer pressure is one of the hardest things in life for many. Then if you submit to it you just never know if you have the disease or not. Yet truth be told we all have to be responsible for our own actions peer pressure or not!! I'm in recovery myself from drug addiciton. I was 24 when I got into recovery and my son overdosed 7 months ago at age 24. Life just isn't fair sometimes. We are all victims in this life but we must move forward best we can. One way is just like you did in your poem expressing yourself in your writing or sharing with a friend so you don't stay stuck. Thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me.
Much Love
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Thank you so much for your comment. I enjoyed your work as well. She I believe really is my true love and I think I will go for it. T
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...woah.
Amazing.
I would give you more than three claps but I can't.
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amazing...
i think this poem was very well written. i could almost picture myself as you, the emotion you felt, the pain in your mind... i felt it all! i believe that is the true essence of poetry, to draw others into the emotion you were in while writing is very hard but, you seemed to have grasped that aspect and done it!! A+ hun lol ;D
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Great
im sorry if this happened to you but this is a fantastic poem.
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so sad... very well written though,
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I chose alcohol to find solace from the pain of my youth. In those days teen drinkers were not really seen as a problem. You are not to blame for the subjects obsession. No one put the bottle to my lips, we all have our own form of release and until they find their cure, they won't. Help them through it, but do not accept blame, it is not yours.
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This is so true. Not just a true story, but a true feeling. Depression like this is contagious, upset, too, and when everyone suffers with you, and sometimes even after you're cured. Wow, it's powerful. You are a wonderful writer. I hope you keep it up!
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this is really upsetting, I just hope the person who tried to help you stop is cured them selves. It was a really flowing piece and i enjoyed the piece. The last two lineswhere my favourite "But what do I do to take the troubles from you?
Put some glass in my veins, so I can bleed too?" It's really strong , x welldone x ,
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this is really sad, it's happened to me too =/ except that i'm not cured.. [lol] i really hope you can help your friend
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Damn this is deep and very strong...honest and truthful to the end...it is an illness and one many use to escape real pain in their life...it is a way of hiding from our problems...I am glad you found writing as a way of letting go...
Best to you!
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wonderful poem
i like the poem and it is sad i hope things aren't too bad for you
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I think this is what poetry is supposed to do. Life is not all pretty and rosy and cheerful. People hurt, people cry and people bleed and I think this was 100 percent honest and real. thanks for sharing your soul tonight.
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i love it...
its kinda sad and deep...
but every person has a different way of expressing themselves... [i wouldnt exactly cut myself] and yours of writing it down is rlly beautiful
and... what does it feels to harm urself...?
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jesus christ this is great!!! you seem to have a lot of mixed emotions about self mutilation so I cant tell whether you think its right or wrong, and personally i think cutting is wrong, but if it works for you then i cant stop you. but RIGHT ON, KEEP WRITING!!
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The sorry truth is im aloud to do it but knowone else I love is. I really appreciate finding you x
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