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Living In Hell

Living In Hell

I see the burns,
the scrapes and cuts
I see the kids
No longer taking turns
I know how they feel
All alone and lost
They feel scared,
Their hearts tossed.
Living in hell
Is what this is
A secret around
One I'll never tell.

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  • Pretty Britty gold member
    May 7

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    This is a really good piece.
    The lines are very short but
    I think that adds to the raw emotion of the piece.
    Very well done!

  • loves-last-angel
    April 8

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    Raw

    this has a lot of raw emotion and that is good, I would try to word play to make this poem a little more elaborate but other than that GREAT WRITE!
    - Page <3


  • OnEbAdApPlE
    April 8

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    this was.... interesting!!

    it was okay, I think you could have made it alittle wetter,.... i dont know how to say it. three applauses for attempting a smile!!