When lovers meet
their eyes are for each other
only.
Friends are left in the wake
of a quickly accelerating love boat.
Waves shove aside past giggles of friendship.
Somewhere between the day and the night
the single friend weeps,
for the couple's time has begun.
The night will certainly pass quickly,
but the friend has no value
anymore.
When the day and the night meet,
and the waves reach the skies,
someone is lost and drowning.
But something else has begun on the waters...
Author notes
Gold - Clouded
A contest entry
- When the Day met the Night by ixtli.
450 points, ended April 16, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Absolute Best Prewrite by Heavens Child.
800 points, ended April 25, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Very Best!!!!!--contestant vote by TabbyCat.
600 points, ended May 8, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
There you go! Enjoy!
Comments
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sad and beautiful at the same time. good luck in the contest.
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Your metaphor here was interesting...how sad when a love relationship replaces all other friendships. Relationships are bound to change, but do they have to end?
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I love the creativity of the images in your poem. And how often doesn't this senario repeat itself again and again. Thank you for entering.
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I love the expression 'love boat' in your poem and this reminds me somewhat of female relationships where all the female friends are forgotten once the boyfriend comes along, meaning that this poem is REAL. This is the way life is.
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Wow. I can really relate to this. I like the direction you've gone with the prompt. Good luck and thanks for entering!
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Excellent "left in the wake of a quickly accelerating love boat". Ominous ending.
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WOW---A very impressive write!!---Well written & versed with good flow & Imagery--!--Well Done & Best of Luck in the Contest!
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*feels guilty* If I've done anything even remotely similar to this to you, I'm sorry. Your friendship means so much to me; I hope you know and believe that!
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I enjoyed.. more then that you have written a wonderful poem.
Speaks thoughts and beautifully penned
Julie
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