Like a butterfly locked within the glass,
forced to look upon her past.
She sees one mistake above all the rest,
she sees his face and a crack in her chest.
She sees the pain he put her through,
she sees the lies she never knew.
She sees the cuts on her pale thin wrist,
she sees the blood trickle down her clasped fist.
She sees the broken promise above all...
She sees her tears slowly fall.
Like a butterfly let free from the taunting glass,
Choosing to let go of her painful past.
Author notes
How can A Butterfly Fly, When Shes Locked Away.
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.....Written by the girl who almost had him
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awww so sad, but so true.
I can relate to it like it was about me. -
i like this piece a lot....my fav. lines were the last two...it's amazing how two little lines can change what we percieve in poetry
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I know that feeling, but letting go is the hardest thing and I hope you can understand that it's not your regret, it should be his. You did nothing wrong, protecting ourselves from lies and invasion isn't always as easy as people make it out to be, it's damn hard and frightening.
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Beautiful
This was amazing! It flowed smoothly and was just so powerful. It really spoke to me and I loved it.
I especially loved how you used a butterfly as a symbol of freedom and letting go.
*She sees the pain he put her through,
she sees the lies she never knew.*
I think those were my favorite lines. It reminds me of my first boyfriend and all the things that happened with him. Isn't it scary how you think you know someone inside and out, yet you find out later it was all a lie?
Great job, as always,
<3
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Good Job!!!
I am almost speechless...I am so very impressed with the pieces I have read of yours. I like the idea behind this one and the imagery is intense. I could see it so clearly and feel it at the same time. You are truly gifted. I really feel this is one of the best pieces I have read on this site in my limited time on here. Great Job!!! Very impressed, ~Josh
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Oh wow, so powerful - the quote and the poem both do justice to each other
thanks for your submission
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Wow this is amazing it has the 'wowfactor' Lmao it's amazing you are really telented and I absoloutly love the idea of this one well done =]
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this is exactly how i have been feeling lately. no matter what anyone says you have to follow your heart and be yourself. if you can write like this you can go far.
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Me oh my oh. So so beautiful!! I like it alot!
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Interesting
Good write.
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You do it
so lovely you write. Yet sometimes I think you chose to torment me.
beautifully broken we all are yet the butterfly to delicate to see. Im sick of the peoms we write. over and over the same thing. For once Im forgiving and forgeting and opening a new world with diferent veiws.
Im breaking free ....from him and the girl who chooses to think she almost had him. Im starting over.
The pain I'm forgeting
this butterfluy has found her wings sweetie pie.
i think you inspired me
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