Heeeeeere fishy fishy, nothing but time here
heeeeeere fishy fishy, hey wheres my beer.
I'm standing in this water cause my damn canoe done sunk
Still I want to catch them fish , at least I think, I thunk
My ole' ladies all pissed off cause I am out here drunk.
But thats what the fishermen do, it is our weekend junk.
Heeeeeere fishy fishy.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest. by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended April 24, 2008, 11 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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That's funny. I like it. It made me laugh. 
Very different. Although, where's should have an apostrophe.
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LMAO.... Love it thank you for the
Much needed and refreshing.
Thank you for the entry in my contest.
Delila
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Love it, potential for excelling further
Loved it, put a big fat smile on my face. All read really well, just one thing which took the edge of perfection off for me was the line at the end: But thats what the fishermen do, it is our weekend junk.
Firstly I think 'but that is'....and.....'it's just our' would read far better.
But also, for me this is the weakest line anyway, and right at the end it would be great to finish on a high spot. Of course, this is just in my honest opinion.
Love the idea, the poem, just could be greater than is at present.
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This is great! I was thinking that you sounded drunk, then got to the 3rd to last line and went, ah! Nice write!
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Hi, what are you doing here!
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This one actually made me smile! Very easy to picture, actually kinda sound like my uncle. Haha. Best of luck!
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I liked this poem because it made me laugh and I could picture the scene. this was very cute!
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