Getting high, a thrill but danger prevails,
The devil of course is in the details.
Don't get too slow and don't go too low.
Follow all the rules and you'll soar like a pro.
Up in the air, there is not a care in the world.
Wind blows in your face, your sail unfurled.
Up here, the joys of a bird are finally found,
Worries of life, stay down on the ground.
Up, down, left, right, and even sideways.
This is turning out to be one of those days.
The uplifting air pulls you to great heights,
This is it... one of those great flights.
Look out... enjoy the breathtaking view,
Up here, there's no limit to what you can do!
Quietly glide, the wind has a soft sound,
But the wings are gently urging you down.
Suddenly the ground is all you can see,
Hurry, think fast, and look out for that tree!
Solid objects and troubles all come back,
Obstacles, targets, plans, things to whack!
Timing, forces, pressure, flare... hard... now!
Perfect touchdown. the feeling is Wow!
With each flight you need a good landing.
You have to feel it to have an understanding.
Author notes
This is not about drugs.
Written December 10th, 2003
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Perhaps work a bit on your meter, you can rhyme, but it's pointless to rhyme if your meter is wrong. Kudos for actually rhyming though, I hate free verse very much, thank you for rhyming. -
At first I honestly thought this was about doing drugs, but I am so glad you clarified that. This was really good...I have to admit that you did a really good job. A life with fascination is one of the best lives you can give your mind. Great job!
~Tiffany -
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a very good poem....i liked the ryhming in it...keep it up!
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i never assumed it was about drugs. well written, joys of life.
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Thermals and gliding
try it from a beach-front hotel balcony
so sorry to hear about your landing!
Dave -
Wow! Wow! yeah that's all I can get out.
Keep Feelin' Fascination,
~Tiffany~ -
Wooohooo!
What a ride!
Thanks! -
wow. I flew so fast it messed up my hair.
you are solely responsible for me looking like Don King right now.
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Wow, this was awesome. A thrill ride in a poem, never thought I'd see that, haha. This was a very enjoyable read. It was quite upbeat, somewhat humourous, and just really uplifting. Overall, this was just a super fun piece, nice work.
All the best, quicksilver -
Layered and surging
I know ... Not drugs at all ... Soar, dearest Heart ... and enjoy the perfect touchdown ...
May you enjoy the most breathtaking View whilst journeying the Skies.
Love.
Myra -
Great! I feel like a dove now- I felt the air in my hair and the fresh breeze- a very good poem on an unusual theme- dream of most of us- very well set!
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Cute ryhme!
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