how can I tell you
knowing your feelings for me
dare I say his name?
Author notes
Written December 10th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku's About Water 'n' stuff... Prewrites Welcome by PerVirtuous.
1300 points, ended August 18, 2007, 55 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Triangles by Celticjedi.
600 points, ended May 7, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I like it! Short and to the point, haikus are fun that way. Thanks for entering this, you did a great job. Keep it up and good luck!
~Cj
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Short and to the point. I suggest adding -- or some other form of punctuation to the end of the first line to keep it seperate from the second line: otherwise, reading it through for the first time, the reader may try to combine the two.
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!
~Bitter Irony -
wow - I love it
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this poem is so good its short but its really good it made me want to read it over and over and over hehe well good job keep writing! heh yay i entered your contest! yay well good job
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LOVE ME
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Amazing!!!!!!!!
wow this poem is very diffrent that anything ive read i like it though its alot said in just the 3 lines but yea awsome job ~mary~a -
wow... a lot said in three lines. you could totally read several different angles into this poem.. you could see a love triangle going on, or anything else for that matter. AWESOME job, i really liked it... keep it up! you have a talent for putting power behind your words.
Sarah Beth -
Nice little Ku, I came here looking for your featured poem but I can't find it. Don't worry I didn't click on it.
Red -
One of your first reads for me
So much said in 3 lines
Powerful
Do come see me I just posted one
BTW Nice to meet you and welcome to AP
Blessings
Susan~~~~
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Very Creative
Your poem is great
I'm glad I got to read it
Thank you for sharing
God Bless, Sunshine
P.S. Thank you for your comments -
good stuff
~*~Blu~*~ -
Oh gee... this is sad and a difficult situation to be in. Makes me think that its time to tell the person who loves you that you are in love with someone else... very hard place to be.
You did a great job on this haiku, a pleasure to read,
~ Wendy -
yes i agree
with angeleyes323
the ending puts that extra
push.
stellar write
-ash- -
The last line is a good effect for this piece. A unique haiku. Thanks for sharing...
~Kathy -
i know how that goes i was cuaght up in a love triangle and now i try not to speak of the boy cuz i know i was nothing to him
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