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I still believe

 

I am but "A Torn Soldier" within this place

trapped between darkness with the human race

My heart is connected through hardened steel

Yet, why do tears fall when I cannot feel?

 

This never ending life as a modern slave

has nothing left and now awaits his grave

To those fields I must go to forever grieve

though my soul is pure, ...I STILL BELIEVE!

 

 

 

Author notes

artwork by Luis Royo

 

Man cannot be something he's not,

but his soul can be anything it desires

A contest entry

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  • Lady Altheia
    April 25, 2008

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    Hoodwinked

    We can't be anything but ourselves. We need to learn to bring our souls to the surface. Thank you for sharing your poem.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Hood-Wink!

    so full of emotion, such strong intensity in conveying the message of this piece. so well penned.


  • tawk gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Hood-Winked!

    Wow what an amazing write! The imagery and flow are wonderful You are such a talented writer I feel so blessed to read your write Keep up the amazing writing. Again I am here if you ever need to just talk. You are always in my prayers and thoughts. Hugs Theresa


  • Shamanicmusings
    April 25, 2008

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    Hoodwinked

    What can I say?
    Heart-rending loss pours from your pen and a bitter ink swirls in your dark inkwell.


  • blondone
    April 24, 2008
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    Hood-Wink...

    Oh now this has touched my inner soul the words are so real life, the truth is unfolded in the authors notes I will remember the lines trapped between darkness and the human race ~~~ oh so powerful

    You have a great day and by the way you've been Hood-Winked by the Poetic Bandits


  • ShelleyA gold member
    April 11, 2008
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    Good title. 65 words exactly. Very good interpretation on the picture prompt and very nice story poem. Heartfelt. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice imagery. Lovely depth of feeling. Nice descriptives and rhythm. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 8, 2008
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    An amazing picture that serves to inspire writers in this contest. Such an inspiring write you have penned here - so fitting. Title is terrific - suits the picture to a t. A lovely conclusion- relating back to the title- bringing everything in between to a fitting closure.


  • Bluebook Pet
    April 8, 2008
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    what a great picture... about the write... secret


  • Meme Wheeler
    April 8, 2008
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    This is great, and the title just pulled me in.


  • rebelsavior
    April 8, 2008

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    Amazing

    I LOVE the picture, and the poem makes it all the better... but since the main point of this site is poetry, I thought the poem was outstanding, and I adore the writing, the way the two stanzas work together quite nicely...nice work

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