Too many
isolated beats
with this missing heart.
A cause unjust
backed by
the disease of man.
Our love
dark and reckless
like a para-sail in the deep deep night.
I hold no sympathy
for
the sleeveless.
Author notes
2 months of time....a damage irreplaceable.
can you catch the drift?
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Its so short, but so punchy and very prevoking, needless to say I really like it, I just dont think I have quite got my head around it yet, particularly the last line its so intriguing, layered I think. I really should think about what i write down rather than just write what i'm thinking, sorry if it makes little sense! I really like this though, especially that first line, wish i'd written that, its awesome! So glad to see you're still as awesome and inspiring as i remember! Great write, xSleeperx
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The title caught my attention so i had to check it out
"Too many isolated beats with this missing heart"
This is a very clever line
All in all a very good write. -
yes indeed,isolated beats is part of our thinking. we are tuned from the begining to isolation..competition aggravates it..an eye opener dear..thank you for sharing
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sail in the deep deep night.
keep me calm at mind. and for those without sleeves. i agree.
but i leave you at the ambiguous motion of mentioning something worth not mentioning at all.
what is this disease of man?
and why have you not written more.
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I didn't understand your write pretty well... although the title called my attention immediately. It sounds like something about a crime, but the third stanza confuses me, as well as your Author's notes. Pretty abstract there, congratulations.
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