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[ You must fall hard to make mistakes ]

You must fall hard to make mistakes
to loose the heart you tried to take.

You must move on in this dreary game
find the mans who's hearts you'll tame.

You must walk far to find the gold
to find the heart you're meant to hold.

You must hold on to this risky ride
keep him tight close by your side.

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a random write. it has some meaning.

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  • nirmal
    April 8, 2008
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    gentle and powerful

    10 lines are enough to convey the message but had you written more i would have enjoyed more.. there is a raw beauty in your poems.. try to refine it and write more.. i would definitely like to re read this poem.. thanks for this lovely piece of work