[fuck it]
i'm so over it
i gave you my everything
and you gave me pills
i gave you my hand
and you gave me the finger
i gave you my heart
and you gave me death
fuck it
[i'm so over it]
i tried
even pleaded
and was your bitch
so many nights
alone
while you were out playing
numbness
finally
those pills did something
i'm so over it
[fuck it]
Immortal execution for the brain
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I think this is a gfreat exspressional write and the readers can feel the frustration NIcely done and great form for this!
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oh oh...this is my first time to read this kind of work from you which is totally different and just love it. i do write dark poems lately but this one i think is one of your best write so far wwith regards to dark poem. i could sense the other side of your personality here and i can relate this and i should say great...dark and so full of emotions involve. goodluck. hope this one win
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Wow! This is a great take on the prompt hun. So dark, and so sad. I think that many people can relate to this.
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strong
should be "were" playing I think
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lol - what a way to open a write!
I can almost feel the anger burning from this page but it's such a sad write too.
It's horrible that other people have the ability to alter our perceptions of ourselves isn't it?
well done!
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wow.. cuz
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Seesh woman I can totally relate to that!! I've so been there.. *sigh*
Love what you've done here and sometimes you can only use 4 letter words to get it across!!
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Been here a time or two....I think.....Hmmmmmm.....those younger days were a blur of drinking and drugs!!! I actually think that my ex probably would have writtenthis for me now that I think about it!! Well either way I think that this is awesome and many people could totally relate....Very well done and I love the form...Best of luck here lil niece
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I love it!!! So many emotions, so much bitter anger; all so succinctly expressed.
My very best wishes to you in the contest, sweetheart.
Margaret
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-blinks-
Well done.
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