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Vengeance of the Sea

Inhale...
Exhale...
Inhale...
Exhale...
Timed to the beat of the fluttering sail.
Sweetness of rain,
Salt of the Sea
Invigors the soul, the core of me.

Honest and open,
Fractured and broken--
Waves burst forth from a tidal motion.
Pushed and pulled,
Calmed and lulled--
Much like the forecast of life was foretold.

Inhale...
Exhale...
Inhale...
Exhale...
Thrown about by a turbulant gale.
Traitorous waves,
No port for protection
But only the ocean's rough insurrection.

Fickle and cruel
Used as a tool
She asserts with a vengeance her absolute rule.
Breathing deep
She wakes from her sleep
And steals men's souls, those who gave her to keep.

Author notes

To explain a bit: The prompt you gave reminded me of a storm I once experienced from a cliff overhanging the Pacific Ocean. The waters were so choppy, but so well timed that I could have sworn the ocean was alive and breathing.

 

I suppose the moral of the story is that one should not take for granted what can take one completely.

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  • Heavens Child
    April 25, 2008

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    An absolutely beautiful write. The flow and rhyme is impeccable. Well done and thank you for entering.

  • calendar girl
    April 19, 2008
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    AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH lovvvveeee this so very very much. omg.

  • Musafir
    April 8, 2008
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    nice poem.
    Best wishes and good luck

  • DreamReader
    April 8, 2008

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    amazing

    absolutely amazing...the scheme...the wording...everything...wow...just wow

    absolutely great write and good luck with your contest...this piece deserves the gold


  • Avendesora Dreamer
    April 8, 2008

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    This is what I was after with this contest: something unexpected, but clearly expressed. This was both, most definatly. I really liked this stanza "Honest and open,
    Fractured and broken--
    Waves burst forth from a tidal motion.
    Pushed and pulled,
    Calmed and lulled--
    Much like the forecast of life was fortold"

    Thank you, and best of luck in the contest!
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