Inhale...
Exhale...
Inhale...
Exhale...
Timed to the beat of the fluttering sail.
Sweetness of rain,
Salt of the Sea
Invigors the soul, the core of me.
Honest and open,
Fractured and broken--
Waves burst forth from a tidal motion.
Pushed and pulled,
Calmed and lulled--
Much like the forecast of life was foretold.
Inhale...
Exhale...
Inhale...
Exhale...
Thrown about by a turbulant gale.
Traitorous waves,
No port for protection
But only the ocean's rough insurrection.
Fickle and cruel
Used as a tool
She asserts with a vengeance her absolute rule.
Breathing deep
She wakes from her sleep
And steals men's souls, those who gave her to keep.
Author notes
To explain a bit: The prompt you gave reminded me of a storm I once experienced from a cliff overhanging the Pacific Ocean. The waters were so choppy, but so well timed that I could have sworn the ocean was alive and breathing.
I suppose the moral of the story is that one should not take for granted what can take one completely.
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An absolutely beautiful write. The flow and rhyme is impeccable. Well done and thank you for entering.
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nice poem.
Best wishes and good luck
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amazing
absolutely amazing...the scheme...the wording...everything...wow...just wow
absolutely great write and good luck with your contest...this piece deserves the gold
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This is what I was after with this contest: something unexpected, but clearly expressed. This was both, most definatly. I really liked this stanza "Honest and open,
Fractured and broken--
Waves burst forth from a tidal motion.
Pushed and pulled,
Calmed and lulled--
Much like the forecast of life was fortold"
Thank you, and best of luck in the contest!
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