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Prisma

Rainbows shine pure through spray
of drops, prismatic view
of multi-coloured hue
emerges from the grey.
What seem impressions true
tomorrow melt away.

Dawn's daily spider play
displays silk nets anew,
through diamond stranded dew
lights scintillate, breeze sway –
all things sing echo, clue
interpreting the Way.

Dew's sparkling interplay

between earth, water too,

empowers life; curfew

of night lifts, gifts relay

world’s waking wonder woo, 

air slakes thirst, scorns delay.

. 

Nature must convey

respect to dew as due,

for where its overdue

photosynthesis may

not from primaeval stew

evolve - for mammals too 

no haemoglobulu.

. 

Life offers [th]us each day
diversity where you
can rediscover new
its beauty on your way
to Paradise, - display
of nuances, each true.

So as we travel through
time’s complex interplay
perhaps impressions stay,
perhaps disperse into
new background bright and blue,
perhaps... but who can say ?

How can links one mind drew
then be restated ?  Clay
may be remodelled, hay
cut neatly so a few
twin stems splice true , but who
may reproduce mind ray
unique of each soul’s s[t]ay ?

 

 


 

Author notes

robi3_0825_robi3_0000 XXX_NZX

 

wor[l]ds in [b]rackets convey two or more meanings

[th]us thus and or us

s[t]ay say and or stay

Dew Image http://www.flickr.com/photos/lordv/2742972227/

 

rainbow Eye Background http://www.flickr.com/photos/scaryjerrygirl/2380686699/

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  • Invitation au Voyage

    Toute digression mise à part:


    Entre les pairs que nous sommes, aucun impair ne peut être commis : aucun mépris du prisme n'est permis, et ce prisma primé à juste titre par les épris de rimes, nous le prîmes et le remîmes en ligne de mire, pour rédimer les mirages et admirer les images.


  • Wow I love the backround! This is soooo mysterious and awesome.


  • Emmyb gold member
    February 9

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    nice

    I like your imagery here. Your rhyming style is interesting. In fact the piece is written in a good rhythem that keeps us flowing with the poem. Interesting subject - lots of references to colour, which brings the poem a well rounded feel. Perhaps the way this is written is meant to represent the topic of Time you also seem to refer to.
    PS i really like this background!!

    Thanks for putting this up. I may come back to it in a few days and try again to see if i can spot anything else1

    Emma


  • daviscth silver member
    April 10, 2008

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    First of all, this is a very unique background and is awesome with your picture. I loved your words too, the imagery is great. Thanks for posting in my contest.


  • MissApparition
    April 9, 2008

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    Okay, now this background I like...much less busy!

    What a wonderfully written piece, with so much depth. It was "eye opening", no pun intended! Time is one of those elements that truly intrigues me when placed in a wonderful piece of writing...so many areas to explore. Bravo!


  • Lily of the Valley
    April 8, 2008

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    Time, ever fluid marches on and what is here right now is gone in a split second just as raindrops dissipate and the rainbow disappears. It seems we never really know what will happen in life but we should make the most of opportunities presented to us, which is perhaps something I should remember as I make my way to paradise. Each person’s road is unique and I don’t think it can or should be reproduced. It is, after all, what makes the world go round. Beautiful rhythm and rhyme, as always


  • RedAquarius
    April 8, 2008

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    I like how the brackets show a second word underneath, opening another level of meaning. And I quite enjoy this journey of musings, something I do myself so often.

    What I think I like best though, is how at first I was inclined to discount this poem, when I skimmed and saw the rhyme scheme, which I felt was rather obvious and basic. And then, I read it once quietly, next aloud and it made me really think and I didn't even notice the rhyme, other than to say - oh how it flows, so smooth and fluid. Kudos, kudos.

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