I know our sheets are purple
but it is afterwards
and dark
and all I feel are sleepy kisses
at my nipples
slowing
we
made
love
to St Louis’ bells’ chiming
three in N’awlins
I cradle two sweet heads as
our musk settles
in the dark
the scent of purple
Author notes
You didn't say it had to be one person.
I have no idea what "sappy" means. If this is "sappy", tough. I guess.
In a list
A contest entry
- You Didn't Think I Would Forget Us, Did You? Women ONLY by Dalaney.
1400 points, ended May 9, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This leaves me in dejavu, and yet the scent of purple, I am drawn and enchanted into this lush imagery, it's something special...
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OH MY. Indeed Unique one. this was something else.
Love ya
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Mhm. It's still where I go when I am lying awake in my bed!
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and how!
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mhm
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This is so wonderful, and hot! Not quite what I need for the tutorial, but just what I need for me.
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Well I was asked for something erotic and sensual, and so that's what I gave the setter. Don't be shy - eroticism is a valid subject for poetry, and so it's a valid subject for the study of poetry.
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I liked it so much I entered the contest
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Good on you! I'll go looking for your entry.
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you said nipples
nice
very avant garde
and enjoyable
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{chuckling at "avant garde"} I have been called some things in my time.
The contest setter wanted something sexy without being all-out, no-holds-barred rumpin'-and-pumpin'. So I wrote this. Fin d'histoire!
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Sho' 'nuff!
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Hey, boo!
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Oh my!!! Is this ever sensuality off the beaten path... and in N'awlins no less, just adding fuel to the fire!!! Erotica ala exotica...
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There's just something about N'awlins.
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believe me....this is NOT sappy...
Sensual yes, beautiful yes, but not sappy.
Love to you, Lane
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humm... three's company, four's a crowd?
Pretty good Sis!
Love,
Amera♥
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I'll take "pretty good"
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seems perfect to me, exactly on her prompting.
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Thanks bro - a perfect poem from a perfect prompt?
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yes, purple is wonderful color, and also atimes adistinct state of mind. Purple in New Orleans -laissez le bon temps roulez - very nice...'skid
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Oh, on a laisse le bon ton roulet, boo, you bet! But I don't know if the competition setter wanted this kind of poem. We'll see. Thanks for the enthusiasm.
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