A tiny little girl awaits
to feel the most amazing things.
No longer content with toys,
dolls and quarter machine rings.
She hears beautiful music.
Her soul completely full beneath.
Her surface features are amusing
like all the dreams she keeps.
She can see the stars at night
and they reflect in her dark eyes.
Light burns through them like glass.
So much life inside her small size.
Crystal clear emotions fly
from inside her tiny little heart.
Beating simply to keep waiting
for her adult entitled freedom to start.
Grow and rise, learn and live.
Yearn for tomorrow with a fire.
Dream little girl, please dream
and become whatever you desire.
Author notes
"Every breath exhales onto a changed world"
This quote just made me think of children and how they will change the world as they grow and become a part of society itself. Thanks for the inspiration, this was very refreshing for me.
A contest entry
- A breath exhaled---pay it forward contest--NOT A QUICKIE!!!! by Avendesora Dreamer.
450 points, ended May 1, 2008, 6 entries
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Comments
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I really like this, particularly the last verse and these lines: "
She can see the stars at night
and they reflect in her dark eyes."
You capture the innocent hope of childhood so well.
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Innocent and sweet. Nice flow and rhyme, though I did stumble on the last line of the third and fourth stanza.
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You're quite welcome, and thank you for this (and I don't mean this in a condecending way at all" pretty little poem. I did not expect the phrase to be about a little girl, but your depiction fits very well, and reminds me of my little sisters...for me the best stanzas were the last two, particularly the phrase "grow and rise, learn and live. year for tomorrow with a fire"
thank you for your entry and good luck! -
You did a good job with the rhyme here. And it was a good poem. But the rhythm was almost nonexistent, though that was probably intentional.
Still, kudos on a poem well penned.
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