Are you sitting comfortably?
Let me weave this spell
To make your heart a-flutter
And ease the pain as well
hold your arms out to me
Let me trace those crimson lines
And fill them up with magic
So subtle and sublime
Are you sitting comfortably?
Will you take a sip as well?
Let these emerald dreams enfold you
And deliver you from your hell
I can trace your heart with needle point
Even when it's burnt and black
For absinthe tears and heroin dreams
Will absolve you of all that
I have the means to save you
You are all damaged goods to me
So let me entertain you all
With absinthe tears and heroin dreams...
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Comments
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for this there is only one word and even that does not do it justice, amazing, I have and am dealing with issues like this, it fits the subject perfectly and the word choice and form are with out a doubt flawless great job!
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this poem made me have a flashback...
"hold your arms out to me
Let me trace those crimson lines
And fill them up with magic
So subtle and sublime"
....this part especially...when i read it i had an image in my head of when my ex-boyfriend used to do my drugs....i don't do drugs anymore...it flowed really nicely and i did like it...but it gave me the chills. -
this is wicked!
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"hold your arms out to me
Let me trace those crimson lines
And fill them up with magic
So subtle and sublime' That stanza is really intriguing.
I am not a huge fan of rhyming poems, but this one wasn't too bad. Also, I feel like you could have developed this more to add some length and stronger imagery. Thank you for entering. -
Thank you for your wonderful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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This is amazing. You really got my attention peaked and kept it throughout the entire poem. thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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