Long vine
Thorny stem arcs
Alternating green leaf
White blossom grows juicy drupelets
Sweet fruit
Author notes
cinguain form poem, 5 lines using syllable counts of 2,4,6,8,2.
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FANTASTIC
Hi Charley,
A wonderful write you have penned here with such beautiful visuals woven into your words.Your writes are always written from deep within your heart, and this shows through your words.You are always a real pleasure to read.
I have to agree with Event Horizon's comment,as he has said everything that I was thinking of saying myself lol lol.
Thank you for sharing such beauty with us.
Your friend in poetry,
~Angel~
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Thank you Angel for reading and commenting. It's always great to hear from you.
Lots of Love,
Charley
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ooh very pretty.. made my mouth water haha good write!
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Thanks for reading and commenting on raspberries. I love writing cinquains. I actually have a patch of raspberries that I grow and picked 55 pints a couple years ago from them. yummy. thanks again.
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I really have to hand it to you. Your cinguain poetry is amazing! I'm a big fan of your cinguain works. The flow is outstanding and I'm guessing with cinguains that's one of the things you have to worry about most since there is a rule of how it should be written not giving you much freedom, but you overcome that issue with ease. The imagery you used in this piece is flawless, every word and line painted a picture in my head which not alot of poems can do. Really this is an outstanding piece, but it's best if I stop ranting about this poem or someone might get jealous haha...OUTSTANDING WRITE!!!
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Thank you for the awesome comment. I really do enjoy this form. I definately plan to do more. Thanks again.
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Excellent
Oh wow!!!!!
What a wonderfully penned piece of poetry.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
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Thank you Cynthia, I love doing cinquains they are so much fun. Thanks for reading and commenting, it is much appreciated.
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I culd never do this! I would loose count or forget what I was doing. xD I love this though, it captures the style and yet it has your own personal flair...wonderful!! In all, I found it sweet and for it to be so small, it speaks volumes..
-Luna
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Thank you Luna for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. Cinquains are fun to do. Thanks again.
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I tried a cinquain once but yours is far better than mine ws. It is very descriptive and alluring just like the fruit itself. Nicely done.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.
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Beautiful write, Charley. This has beautiful imagery and wonderful poetic form. Raspberries are wonderful, especially in the spring and summer. Refreshing on those warm days. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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Thank you Haley for your wonderful critique of my poem. Always appreciate hearing from you.
Lots of love,
Charley
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