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moths

lamp posts-
in a glorius dance
moths attack light

A contest entry

critique please, a real one

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  • Kathraina silver member
    January 4
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    fantastic imagery

    ♥ kathraina


  • Mistress Masquerade
    April 14, 2008

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    its beatufil and creates a very pleasing image while bringing back hilarious memories from last summer. thank you for this work.


  • Kelli Marie
    April 8, 2008

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    Very nice haiku. A great visual. You did a great job. Thank you for sharing in the contest. I like it.
    Kelli


  • Amaranth Dihdzere
    April 7, 2008
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    interesting,i like the flow of words you used in this piece.kepp them coming.