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Little Miss (Lonely)

All your old friends are out tonight,
But you’re bound home by chain.
It’s not one of your body,
It’s a lockdown of your brain.

They left you there,
Weak, sad, and lonely, atop your miserable throne.
Now you hardly have sanity,
To faintly call your own.



You remember just how it happened,
The day, as clear as crystal.
Everything started that terrible night,
When she met Mr. Pistol.

Since she self-destructed,
Life has never been the same.
You point fingers at yourself,
Just to steal away the blame.



That was what pushed them all away,
Made them start to leave.
At first, all of us, we tried to help,
But all you could do was grieve.

Every friend’s still worried though,
Worried about your path.
You’re so caught up in feeling dead,
And all of guilt’s old wrath.



It’s not your fault,
So don't feel bad,
About the varied bath she took,
Your sisters life was scary,
Her world crooked and shook.

But I know that she’s in that, “Better place,”
Just calmly stop to look.
You see, in the end, we all find peace,
And sign Heavens Guestbook.

Author notes

OPTION 2

Um, this poem confuses me, I wrote while I was talking with Jamie, but this ones not about her. This is sort of a culmination of things/thoughts. First, but not most importantly, (irony) its about a person/group of people that are confused about life and its meaning. If thats you, then this is for you too.

I didn't want to be to obvious, so while I was writing it, I put it in the perspective of a troubled teenage girl whose sister committed suicide.

One of my cousins committed suicide about a year ago. We weren't really that close. In fact, when my mom told me, at first I didn't even realize it was him. I don't know if we're blood related, or not, but I'm sorry it had to end like it did Kyle. So this is sort of dedicated to him, I wish could have known you better Kyle. Rest in Peace My Friend.

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  • Silly Rabbit.
    April 16, 2008
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    Hm... very thoughtful... very flowing and easy to read, too. i love the way it just leaped from the page. keep up the good work


  • nikkia
    April 13, 2008

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    this is a brilliant poem and it was written very well. i do get a great sense of your individuality. thank you very much for the entry and good luck in the contest


  • exithere
    April 11, 2008

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    good job. its a nice story about someone who just went through it and couldnt take it and just..i dont know its alot in one. i especially love the last 2 lines.


  • SuicidalLover
    April 9, 2008

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    You don't need to have every word left align a capital. Just a thought. Your choice always.

    Yes..a lot of shit can go through a suicidal mind. Nice touch there. Thanks for entering!


  • PonyPride
    April 8, 2008
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    emotinal and full of heart, good writing and unique and clever end


  • Felissa
    April 8, 2008

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    Certainly a heartfelt write. It describes to the exact point necessary without telling its story in riddles. Though it is a decent length, it has an all-at-once-downpour-of-emotion kind of feel that is very realistic. The fact that the girl described in the poem was overwhelmed comes through very well.

    Peace, love, and yellow submarines,
    the-perfect-storm ~_^
    P.S. Cool username.


  • Emile
    April 7, 2008
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    Good

    This is a strong poem, full of emotion and passion. Your rhyming is good and the theme flows throughout the work. Your word choice is good and the message sent is strong and emotional. You have a good heart and make me feel it through your words, after all poetry is the means of transposing feeling to words and you do it well.


  • Porcelain Doll
    April 7, 2008
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    I like this poem. The concept was awesome, and you got it across wonderfully. The rhythm was a bit off and hard to follow in some places, but the poem kicked ass. I'm bookmarking this one. You've told an interesting story here. I look forward to reading more of your poetry! Welcome to AP.
    ~Amy

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