At first it blossomed
Beautiful and delicate
High on newfound love
Then comfortable
Like our set of flannel sheets
Broken in perfect
Negligence looming
Unaware, we trudge along
Not reconnecting
The end has begun
We're picking through the pieces
Left-overs of us....
Author notes
Prompt - chain haiku
A contest entry
- HAIKU STRING CONTEST... 15 POETS... QUICKIE by Manoj Sanyal.
370 points, ended April 10, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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well expressed.
Best wishes and good luck
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You title your pieces perfectly.
Nice imagery and wording....haiku is something I have never done. Im far too wordy! You make your few words count. The flannel sheets part was my favorite...quite relateable. Great job, good luck in the contest!
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A very beautifully expressed haiku chain about love and the journey that sometimes happens
Wonderfully written with lovely imagery!
All my best to you in the contest
Jasminerose
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