A tiny beating heart..
A small face so full of grace
A little hand that reaches high
Finding a star to wish upon at night..
A life that was never meant to be..
But I wanted you to be here with me
I wanted to love you and be what you needed..
A smile that softens the hardest of hearts..
A tiny body so fragile and cold..
A warm touch so full of love from something
So tiny...
I never had my chance to hold you
I never even saw you..
My heart will have one more piece missing
Will it ever again be whole?
A baby cries for a mothers love somewhere
Down the street and it almost
Makes me start to cry too..
A baby that never took a breath
One with me only in death..
I love you though I do not know you..
I am here waiting for my time
When I will see you running with the wind
And I will think that I'm just dreaming again
But I loved you while you where here with me for
only that short little time
I miss you and I want to hold you,
But maybe I can have my wish someday soon..
A tiny beating heart..
A small face so full of grace
A little hand that reaches high
Finding a star to wish upon at night..
Author notes
Thank you for taking your time to read this.. It was really hard for me to write.. I have lost someone dear to me no more then two nights ago... and I wrote this soon after.. Again thank you for your time..
Please be gentle!!
Comments
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I'm so sorry for your loss and you have imortalized your child wonderfully in this poem. Beautiful words that shar the moments of joy or just the enjoyment of the memories are the greatest tribute you could do for your lost child.
There isnt anything that I can really say negative about the poem although the few lines that rhymed kinda made you go back to make sure you read them right. Its really a beautiful poem and I'm honored that you put it in my contest. Thanks you.
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A most touching and beautiful tribute to the child you lost... this is beautiful it is almost beyond words again...
You are so brave to post this, I'm so proud of you that you had the strength to do it!!!
My heart hears you...
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Thank you.. I'm glad that you like this tribute. I wrote this the night after I lost the baby which was not to long ago..lol.
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Beautiful
Beautiful tribute my friend. I am so sorry for your loss. Remember you have a friend here if you need to talk.
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Thank you very much my friend.. I am glad that you saw beauty in this as well.. It was a beautiful moment for me in life knowing that I carried life.. And though it ended sadly I will always have the memory..
Jetleena
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i think that this was an exellent write for a while i sat here thinking about the family i never got to meet but i knew that i would love them.,
just beautiful.
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My heart slowed down...
This has such an (almost) surreal sense to it. I caught a glimpse of a baby with tiny hands, and feet and ears and then there were lots of echoed memories for me. This brought back memories of over 5 years ago. I can only imagine what strenght and courage you were able to summon to start this piece (let alone finish it). I commend you. I'm moved...I'm thinking: I miss that little one even though the relationship never actually was able to reciprocate. Thanks for sharing this.
AsIThink...
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Thank you my friend for taking your time in reading this.. I am sorry if it brought back memories that you would have rather left alone.. It hurt very much while writing this and it still does.. Thank you for your comment..
Jetleena
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Your are most welcome. Many things bring back memories for people. I appreciate your concern but you don't need to be bothered about how it impacted me. Either way, thanks for the warmth.
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"I know that it kind of really makes no sense"
This makes more sense than most of mine..
"A baby that never took a breath
One with me only in death..
I love you though I do not know you..
I am here waiting for my time"
I have never lost anyone in my life, but these few lines made me really ponder what it would be like. Love the ending stanza
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Thank you very much.. I guess since people keep on telling me that it does I should take that off? hmm..
I am glad that you have yet to lose someone dear to you.. It hurts too much.
I'm glad that you liked it.. and thank you for the kind comment..
Jetleena
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IN A WAY THIS DOES MAKE SENSE!!!!
So many have no one to care for them and there are those of us who want only to love someone, these are the ones who find a way to come together and help each other.
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OH I'M SO SORRY
I'm so sorry for your loss Jetleena. I lost my very first baby when I was almost 6 months pregnant, then I got pregnant 6 months later with my son Matthew who was recently 24 and then died Sept. 16, 2007. I want to encourage you to write out and cry out whatever you need to, it does help even though it feels as though nothing ever again will feel alright because it hurts so bad!! I think your poem is so very precious and it just shows the love pouring out of you for your precious one.
A tiny heart..
A small face so full of grace
A little hand that reaches high
Finding a star to wish upon at night..
Really your poem does not suck, I think it is not only beautiful but excellent in your expression of feelings, emotions and imagery as well. Thank you for sharing with me, I do so understand!
God Bless You
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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I had stillborn son 12 and a half years ago, it was the hardest thing I have ever been through. I'm sitting here typing this to you today as a wife and mother to three beautiful children. Your words have touched me, and I really wish that you would take those author's notes out because there is nothing that sucks about your poem. I'm sorry I can't enter your contest, I have written quite a few poems about this loss and right now I just can't do it again, but I'm so glad I came across your contest and saw the link to this. I hope you get some comfort from your entries. Best to you!
♥
whisper
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I am sorry for your loss my dear.. I can understand why you could not enter.. It was hard for me to even post it.. I did get some comfort for the things that people wrote, and though they made me cry I felt like a weight had been lifted from my shoulders.. It helped a lot.. Thank you for your kind comment and I am taking the Authors Note off..
Peace to you,
Jetleena
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Beautiful poem
a most beautifull immotional and sad poem brought tears to my (83year old) eyes "A tiny beating heart
A small face so full of grace"such beautiful imagery
(i have a four years old granddaughter)Loved It!!!
I have just posted"Tony's Pup" I hope you take the trouble to comment on it for me.Best Wishes George +++ -
awe.. this honestly brought a tear to my eye...;( this is an amazing write as always.
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Thank you very much for your kind comment.. I'm glad that you liked it.. It was a hard write for me, but again thank you very much...
Jetleena
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It doesn't suck it reads pretty good, sad sounding I enjoyed reading it none the less, I hope to talk to you soon
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Thank you for reading this.. I'm sorry that it sounded sad but then again thats the way it was supposed to be.. again thank you for your kind comment...
Jetleena
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This is a very good write... It had me tearing up some.. It makes sense to me, i've gone through some bad times like that myself...
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Thank you very much for your comment.. I'm glad that you enjoyed it...
Peace to you,
Jetleena
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I am so sorry sweety
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Thank you tia (aunt) for your kind comment.. I really wish I could've had the baby.. thank you..
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my princess
I am saddened and touched by your loss. I was honored to sit with you through all this yesterday. I have no words of comfort except you shall see your little one again. I love you sweetie and you are a precious daughter to me, Daddy
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This was lovely and
written in a bold and passionate way that we women
fragily hold in our hearts.
just loved the beauty expressed in your poem!
blessings,blessings, blessings!
ears/proud proud granny!
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Beautiful
The meaning comes across, and it kept my attention. The spirit of the poem is genuinely beautiful. I hope everything works out for you. -
Heartbreaking
Your brokenheart truely speaks here, you words and grief touched my heart, I am so sorry you are going through such sadness and pain, your beautiful write for your little baby are so very soul touching, my thoughts and prayers are with you dear Jetleena, thinking of you at this sad time. A very heart wrenching write tenderly written. -
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Thank you very much for reading this.. I also thank you for taking your time to read this.. It was hard to write but I knew that I had to get my grief out somehow and this was the only way for me.. I thank you for your thoughts and prayers. They will help greatly.. Thank you so very much for your kind words..
Blessings to you,
Jetleena
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Your heart bleeds
Once, long ago, a girlfriend of mine miscarried. Our relationship was never the same. Writing is a GOOD part of the healing process. This one, I ached with you.
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Thank you my dear friend... I can believe that nothing was the same after that for ya'll.. I will heal no worries.. Through writing and I will pull through on my own..
Jetleena
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Courageous
If it pours from your heart then how could it suck and who cares what others think my friend, what matters is how you feel, Some holes in life can never be filled. My son has C.H.A.R.G.E syndrome and died in my arms after his second of fourteen surgeries but he is still with me now, he like his father beleives death is over rated. Everything is meant to be for some reason I have come to find out, I sense a strength in you jetleena and the courage it took to share this with the world is your healing process at work, you are a poet through and through. A simple person stands in a drying creek bed and say this is nothing more than a dying waste but a poet would stand in the same spot and know they were standing in the ocean and I think you know what I mean. Love bleeds from this page in your words my friend.....Z -
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Thank you so much my friend.. It was very hard to write this.. For only writing a little bit and then having to stop from the pain of having to live through the memory..The lose is very recent... And I was alone when I found out that the baby would not live to be with me.. Your words have been a great help to me thank you so much.. I really did need your words at this moment in my life.. And yes death is over rated but it still hurts..Life is a mystery my friend and the reasons behind all is in front of us.. we just never realize it... Again my friend thank you for your words.. I needed them..
Jetleena
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I could feel the sadness of this poem...excellent ...blessings always~ Trisha~
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Thank you very much for your comment.. I am greatful that you took the time to read this..
Peace to you,
Jetleena
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Let me add on to bro..."it doesn't suck" lol
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Thanks glad to know that it doesn't ..Lol.
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very sweet and sad sis. it makes plenty of sense and im glad that you were able to share it ~ cheers!
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thank you brother. I'm glad that you read it..lol. And thanks for saying it doesn't suck..
J.
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